Chemicals

 

 

 

The chemicals were there
the smell, feel, taste
they were careful not to uncork the vial
temptation so strong

They were each other's half
they were careful not to slice the middle of the apple
candied and sweet

He came into her life
on a hot July day by circimstance
perhaps in retrospect, serendipity
meant to be
the timing was, it was
off like a clock with a broken
tick-tock

Came he did even though the clock was
off and out of time
to look at each one seperately
they were ordinary

He tall and thin
lanky eyes of ice-blue
though so warm
one of the last cowboys
a dying breed

She tall dark hair with eyes to match
warm and inviting with a slight foreign accent
ordinary by standards

To see them together
now this was another story of it's own
both looked beautiful, mystical and so magical
electricity sparked , flew shooting
arrows with tips of red love into each other's heart

The timing was off
broken like a clock
the love was so apparent
they fit each other like a glove

He asked her to come with him
with a shakey voice and tears falling
she told him all the reasons she could not

Being in tune with each other
these things he understood
with tears falling he pulled her to him
she did not resist

One kiss? The temptation so great
the timing so off
she touched his face
he drove away out of her life
just as he had driven into it

She sank to her knees
he could see her in his rearview
through the hot July haze and
red dust from the dirt road

Never did they forget the other
as a love like this comes but once in a life time
light years apart, still their
love was not lost

Author's Note

inspired by a book amd movie .. i bet you can tell what book..

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Bittersweet beauty in this poem that tells a story, Chloe! No matter how much love there is between two people, sometimes it just doesn't work. There was a song a few years ago entitled "Sometimes love is not enough" and this came to mind as I read your words. No, I don't know where it came from, but I do know I liked it a lot. Lydia

[James Watts]

Very nice work. As with others I really enjoy the imagery and the flow of this piece. I love how your words seem to sail and how easy you have grabbed and held my attention. Very nice work.

[The Random Writings Of ..]

This gives me shivers... Yes as Lydia says bittersweet. My question is a love when the timing is off, is a love not to be? Maybe a love to never forget to get you to the next great love. I don't know, some a thought. This is very good chloe, and so sad. I have been here before. It is hard to let go, but for the circumstances you must. I am not sure where it came from, but a great write!
xoxo

[Tempest]

Looking at your reviews there is not much I can say that has not been said, This is a wonderful piece. Poignant. Your word choice is precise. I love the decisive wording you use: the apple candied and sweet, the hot july day. I love the timing being off and interjected throughout the poem in just the right places. Where did it come from? I could say certain moments in my life - I have shared something like this in a glace with someone once. Ah bittersweet and skillfully written. Surely this could only be the work of Chloe!

[Rain]

No idea where it came from, but the excellent writing came from you. Beautiful and sad. Rain..

[BrightEyes]

I have no idea where it came from...I can only tell you what it brought to mind...which was a movie...of course I suck with titles...but I think it was Shane. Where it came from..I guess not that important..wonderful write...sometimes love's timing does stink...or perhaps we just overthink things too much?

laura

[Ladysue]

It was magical and heartbreaking and I can so relate to this piece. Some feelings are so strong and so tempting, but sometimes just not enough. These lines were just so heart breaking and say a great deal;
She sank to her knees
he could see her in his rearview

The last stanza is my favorite. I loved this Chloe. A beautiful penned piece!!

[Cold Coffee Magazine]

Not sure where it came from but i liked the imagry alot.

Thank you. It was very vivid and sparked of new love fueled by desire.

Dave

[chr66is]

I thought that this was very interesting as the name implied a strong "chemistry," but you kept referring to the timing being off. It was actually kind of heartbreaking, which is good. Nicely done!
Peace,
Chris

[Roy]

What a beautiful poem. I can see these people and feel a little of their intense feelings. You have developed it all so well and completely. And instead of being tragic, the best of what they shared continued on. Lovely.

[Yvonne Heidt]

You'll have to tell me where it came from - I'm not swift today! Chloe, this is so melancholy - I love how you repeat the stanza "the timing was off" I'm always hoping for the happy ending - but alas, real life shows through!

"Being in tune with each other
these things he understood"

That IS love!

Great job.