The Last Goodbye

 

He would beat her up for the final time

It wouldn’t be hard to provoke him

The usual wrong word did it most days

 

Why do you make me do this

What is wrong with you

Forgive me

 

She would enjoy this one

The very last one

 

Bought you flowers

You know I love you

 

Do you

 

What the hell does that mean

What the hell

 

The drug would temporarily paralyse him

Enough time for her needs

He punched with his right fist

She cut off his arm

The odd kick with his right

She cut off his leg

He came round screaming

 

How you doing babe

You in pain

Don’t worry, it’ll pass

 

Ambulance, get me an ambulance

 

Say the word

 

Please, please

 

No, not that word

The other word, I love you, that one

 

I love you, ambulance, please please

 

Babe, why did you make me do this, forgive me

Just going to take the tourniquets  off

I’ll put them up here

If you get them, be quick

Remember to release them every fifteen minutes

Oh, one more thing

Love you babe.

Reviews

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Elegant poem.
It has a sad tone.
Loved reading :)

[Paul Bell]

Is quite biting.

[Ken Simm.]

Stark, visceral and ironically horrific. This is a rich mixture and full on straight into the readers face. It is superb.

[Paul Bell]

Thanks ken.

[Lyn Anderson]

While this one is a bit messier, I thought of Delores Claiborne. Justice dispensed. How little I love you means when it is used in this way. You have a way of seeing things from another's perspective that is truly a gift.

[Paul Bell]

It did grow arms and legs. Well actually it lost a limb or two. How's things Kara.

[BBP]

Rich and delicate. I liked the way the tables turned and the vengeance was patient and thought out.

[Paul Bell]

Knew you would like the ending.

[BBP]

Twisted and violent with some salty sugar on top...of course I would! lol

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

People keep arguing with me that hate is the strongest emotion one can have....I think love and your poem prove my point! Kudos!😆

[Paul Bell]

Both can be positive and negative. Both can kill you too.

[Valentine]

Strange kind of love if you ask me. Why do you make me do this? Sad thing most forgive and stick with the abuser. 18 women dead from abusers at the shelter I volunteered at. Valentine

[Paul Bell]

It's certainly highlighted here more, and sentences are a lot longer.