Hanging On.

I called you on the phone
But you were dead and all alone
Did you see my name
Are you playing a game
Don’t keep me hanging on

I called you on the phone
But you were dead and all alone
Is this a game
We’re not the same
Don't keep me hanging on

I called you on the phone
But you were dead and all alone
Don’t you understand
I’m a man
Don’t keep me hanging on.

I called you on the phone
But you were dead and all alone
You’ve crossed the line
For the final time
Don’t keep me hanging on.

I called you on the phone
But you were dead and all alone
They told me plain
You’re insane
She's hanging on the phone.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is a resounding spoof on those kind of self-absorbed phone addicts that react to their phone activity as if the whole world is centered on him/her & what he/she expects from others. There are people who interact by letting people respond when they respond. And then there are the demanding impatient types you describe with such sting! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Paul Bell]

Hope that's not you. Margie.
Wonder if people could go a week without their phone. Doubt it.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

She must be a true lightweight! I'm so jealous now, I'm on a strict diet. A truly interesting poem on mind games.

[Paul Bell]

Diets only stress you out.
Just get chased by spooks. Guaranteed loss weight that way.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Hhaha. Then I have plenty of those. I'll send them an invite pronto.

[CD Campbell]

That was a pretty good write with a humorous ending. Showing your age with that last stanza. I remember buying super long chords from radio shack so i could take the phone into my room. Ah the good ole days.

[andrew mitchell]

spooky paul spooky ending lol

[Paul Bell]

it's that time again.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Im sorry Paul! I just have no voice for a phone call...Ive died hanging by the phone.:)

Ps you've really got to get some new honeys...these seem to be dropping like flies on a sticky trap

[Paul Bell]

Think I'm just attracted to the wrong women.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

or they are attracted to you...change the smell good..it'll change the season of your soul.

[.]

Wow! That final line........just superb!

Such a briskly flowing write, reading almost like a song lyric. Wonderful rhyme, rhythm and moves effortlessly to that twisting conclusion. You ended the piece perfectly here.

A fine write, Paul.

[Paul Bell]

Sort of liked the gory ending myself. lol

[Onlyme]

Great for Halloween this one.

[Paul Bell]

Is getting to that time again.

[Einstein Noodle]

https://youtu.be/vQr-U410JOw
;)
ominous closing ... scares me!
E.

[Paul Bell]

Great song. Great snack too.
Practicing for Halloween. lol

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ....................

[Ardra]

Ah new one....hanging on the phone...with mobiles that can be difficult we will need to use land line.... or in emergency cases charger perhaps :)

Don't keep me hanging on...wonderful one....:))

Let's just cut the wire now too much hanging...

[Paul Bell]

Thought you liked hanging. lol

[Ardra]

I like more of drowning... ;)

[Paul Bell]

Is that because your past life is shown to you, and you want to see all the erotic parts. Bad girl. lol

[Ardra]

Hahahha.... I must be a very bad girl then lol
I thought witches were hanged and not drowned... :p

[Paul Bell]

If I remember right. To determine if you were a witch, they threw you in the river. If you drowned, you weren't a witch. If you floated, you were a witch. Then they killed you. Sort of appeals to my sense of humour.

[Ardra]

Lol... that seems so much like your relatives hehehe... ;)