Hello Goodbye

Sit, be patient and absorb every word

Have you
realized that
an approaching
car on
the highway
is louder
than
when it speeds
past
and away?

Maybe
because
after it reaches us
and it becomes loudest,

and our ears cant handle anymore,

it digresses

as the 
volume knob
of its sound

turns slowly

left and

the space

opens  
away
because

now that we've
heard
all that it has to say;

our brief
experience
having drained it
of any substance,

it leaves

broken,
crying
quietly.

Reviews

[Jessica Lynn Polley]

Wow I really really like this poem. To me it can be construed in a couple if different ways. You could be lending to fact that some people are negligent and simple minded and only acknowledge the things in life that sit right in front of them, or you could be saying something to the tune of we actually take from life and the world around us by learning and living in it, or you could mean something else entirely. This is the stuff great poems are made of when three different people can read one poem and all of the take with them something different. Just out of couriosity though I would like to know what your literal meaning was in this poem.

[Pegs Van Damme]

it means it all, I'd hate to trim at the meaning of the whole piece so that it stays able to be interpreted in all the ways you see it as well as how anyone else chooses to place meaning, yknow? it's not as important to single out MY motivation as the sole motivation of this poem when it can mean so many things to others too. Thanks for it all, I really appreciate the feedback and everything you have to say!

[Jessica Lynn Polley]

I would not want to take a way from it meaning either so I understand. I just wanted to make sure I was grasping at what you were trying to say.

[Pegs Van Damme]

definitely

[Matching Socks]

I love the originality in this piece.
The way it's structured, the subject...
That feeling of needing to be heard and that sad quiet retreat.
Using the cars to illustrate this is brilliant. Nice job. :-)

[Pegs Van Damme]

As always, thank you! A note in a song was instrumental in the development of the imagery, i fyou could believe it.

[Matching Socks]

Really? Wow. Cool.
What song I'm curious? :-)

[Pegs Van Damme]

islands- young the giant. the note hit a chord that related it to a car i guess

[Matching Socks]

Ok, know the band but the song isn't familiar. I'll have to youtube it.
:-). Thanks!

[FateDictates]

wow..straight to my list to reread absorb digest and fall in love with once again!! Unique & captivating and for once something different.......loved it, made my day!!

[Pegs Van Damme]

wow, honestly, it makes my day to know it made yours. thanks so much, really!

[FateDictates]

curtsy bow, the pleasure was mine..now write some more pls:)