Unlike a Star

Unlike a Star

A Poem by Lingering Soul



Relic filled soul
Some years of gold 

Guiltless loving hands
Found paving a glow

Turning another petal
Leaning into a dance

Often touching glass
Lost without a halo

Crystal blues to brown
Softly sings to land

A handle of time
Lively tune

Born out of the hundredth star
Seamlinglessly seen too proud

A forgotten whistle 
A resonating truth

Innocently born of life
Clouded up in skies

Sworn to an old stone
Joyous in form

Tender be lady like kind
Caring through night

© 2019 Lingering Soul


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how many are those who paved for us the roads, who gave Love and sacrifices, whose names are not recognized? first I was attached to Your title, then Your photo because I'm a lover for mermaids, then as I read Your words, some of them settled inside me, You took the mermaid legend into another level, She is the timeless golden symbol of Love and sacrificing, like many others ones who might be not a shining star as She but they are there, everywhere... a poem filled with heart my friend, there is deep sadness and a tear coming from the depths into the eye. well done.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Lingering Soul

4 Months Ago

Thank you so much Light
Humbled !
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Rye
Wow! A very nicely written and well expressed poem here. enjoyed

Posted 4 Months Ago


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Lingering Soul

4 Months Ago

Thank you Ryanna
Searching poem this one.
One bright star in a constellation of billions.
Maybe one is all we need though.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Lingering Soul

4 Months Ago

Thank you Paul
Wonderfully expressed with each word painting a picture ;-]

Posted 4 Months Ago


Lingering Soul

4 Months Ago

Thank you thank you
I very much enjoyed this poem, which also looks good on the page... might I ask whether you mean seamlessly in the 7th stanza... the odd neologism is fine by me tho if I am mightily mistook...... Neville

Posted 4 Months Ago


Lingering Soul

4 Months Ago

Thanks Neville
Neville

4 Months Ago

pleasure's mine
a star can only shine no matter what. not easy to always let our light shine. the clouds of life can darken us and steal happiness. who we are cannot be denied though, no matter. must be ourselves and fight the good fight. very deep, powerful and emotive ... :)

Posted 4 Months Ago


Lingering Soul

4 Months Ago

Thank you Pete
A very meaningful review
seems a tortured soul Lingering ... finding release in the dance (love that) .. also find your "..old stone" and incredible image .. that gathers warmth in the sunlight .. we usually think of stones as pretty cold .. yours gives me a completely different perspective "Joyous in form" .. the closing reminds your protagonist of the "rules" one is brought up in ... a woman is nurturing .. even if tormented in life .. carry that pain and reflect love .. the dichotomy in life not lost on me ..this line "Seamlinglessly seen too proud" i really stumble over ... Seamlinglessly is a long stretch unless it is a typo ;) life is a many splendored thing says i .. and i see glimpses of much of it in your poem .. thanks for sharing!
E.


Posted 4 Months Ago


Lingering Soul

4 Months Ago

thanks E
I am thinking of replacing that word
i knew someone this poem reflects...an ex, a dancer...a good soul, born innocent but with a rough life that clouded her existence...
but there was such joy in her expression when she danced...she lit up on stage...
she was the resonating truth of a survivor.
this write hit me....

j.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Lingering Soul

4 Months Ago

Waw you are the only person who gets me !!

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