Wilderness Lovers

Wilderness Lovers

A Poem by Yellow Butterfly
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Haiku

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blue skies contemplate
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the breeze serenades the trees-
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clouds dancing downstream

© 2021 Yellow Butterfly


Author's Note

Yellow Butterfly
Photo taken by me ~Jan 2021~....sprinkling of snow all settled on the ground...it was such a beautiful winters day here in the UK!

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I count an extra syllable in your middle line. The way you wrote that line, it's passive voice -- this takes more words. If you changed that to active voice it would take fewer words & deliver more power: "the breeze serenades the trees" . . . Love your photo -- reminds me of a brief stint on the Miami River in Ohio in winter. Your poem is a wilderness love song (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 4 Years Ago


Yellow Butterfly

4 Years Ago

Thank you Margie for your constructive review..here to learn......and I can see what you mean...will.. read more

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Added on January 30, 2021
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