Time

Yellow Butterfly

Time is ticking fast...

Before you know it, it's past...

Trying to fit everything in...

Before it's too late, where to begin...

Always working with little time to play...

Before you know it, it's another day...

Time is ticking, don't watch it sail by...

Before you know it, your asking yourself.. Why?

Time is ticking, do you get me now...

 

Before you know it, your still asking yourself.. How?

Time is ticking and there is only one thing to do...

Enjoy every second of it because you can never UNDO!

Author's Note

This is my first Poem on Writers Cafe.... be kind!

Reviews

[EylonBear]

very good. using the sense of hearing makes it easier to imagine a little old fashioned clock sitting on a desk. they rhyme is good as well though on the last 3 lines the rhyme drops and they seem a bit out of place. but over all a very good poem especially for someone who doesn't consider themselves a writer.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Yellow Butterfly,
The repeated beginning stanza's stating "time is ticking' reminds of its reality. I have not written many ryming poems and appeals to me. It reminds of a person explaining to a younger person of how life moves fast. A lovely innocent and happy poem all in one! Bless you. I truly enjoyed reading your work as a new writer, (at least to me) and your first poem........................Kathy

[Inspiring Writer]

Wow, this's your first write, sounds great, i loved this whole poem and enjoyed two lines much

Time is ticking and there is only one thing to do...

Enjoy every second of it because you can never UNDO!

great thinking and nicely compared and used this poem with reality. Last lines' awesome and beautiful and real and i wanted to read such a nice piece today. Thanks for making such a nice piece. I enjoyed this write much. Great job.

[Buddhistboy73]

I liked it. Kinda innocent, and yet deep at the same time.
Like the refrain "Time is ticking" and indeed you can't go back or "undo"...so best to enjoy the present, as it's called that because it's a gift....;)

[EMF]

After reading your last poem, I became curious as to what your first was like. So here I am. And it's good. But the distance you have traveled between here and now is noticable. You have a great beat and flow here, with cracking rhyme, but your confidence now in handling language is a joy to watch. Here nothing is forced, nor lax, but your skill has grown immesurably. Still a dynamic write with exceptional ideas to explore

[DogEatingFlowers]

I like the "carpe diem" theme to it. Good job.

[Jibey]

This poem ticks along like the clock it reminds us of... the repetition underlines the time that forms the backdrop of your thoughts... and there is no missing the message...

'your' should be 'you're' = you are *grins*

As I think "Time" is a brilliant thing, disgusting also... I wrote about it too, you capture it very beautiful too...

[Lily Mae]

It's so true that we can never undo..and depending on the moment we may have caused joy or pain.. and time keeps on ticking.. I really like this and welcome to WC.. :) x

[Hotwater]

Yes, very good, it's a 'smile' poem, that's what you get when you've read the last line.... it's a good job, creative and readable. Well done.
*bird*

[Erica Daubert]

overall it has kind of a cutesy, vibe, in a really awesome way. it reminds me of old school rhyming. almost like dr. seuss. he is a personal hero of mine. this made me smile, and i need a smile. thank you for this. i'll be sharing it.