Death's Lullaby

A song I wrote awhile ago. ~A new verse was added~

Have you felt like the end is near?

Because it killed everyone you held dear

Have you felt like those loose ends could never be tied?

Just because they died

Listen to Death's Lullaby

aa he cradles you just before you die

Death's Lullaby

Goodnight, Goodnight

Sleep forever and die

The demised song

Sleep on, Sleep on

Your pain ends now

Let his darkness caress your spirit

you can cry but noone can hear it

while you're off in the underworld

the one place you can't explore

Hear Death's Lullaby

and drift into an endless sleep

Death's Lullaby 

Goodnight, Goodnight

Sleep forever and die

The demised song

Sleep on, Sleep on

Your pain ends now

You witnessed the hate

Love never came on a silver plate

You lived through painful words

That made your vision blurred

End your pain

Summon him

Lord Grim

Death's Lullaby

Goodnight

Sweet dreams

and die

Just a touch

and you're gone

Author's Note

This is the edited version. Any more suggestions?

Reviews

[Juan de Rajah]

A bit overdone, the meaning was spread thinly on the 2nd, 4th and 5th stanza. It could do well with motion and some compression.

[Proxy]

Thank you!

[Peter H]

hmmmmmmm , i love the repetition but i do believe it was over done in this case . the idea is ingenious but it can use some work :)

[Proxy]

Thanks! (: