Pink Petals (Chinese Flowers)

You're the floral pattern in the dark skies
that threatens to never leave
even if you fade into the sunlight
Bloom within my heart softly
just don't wilt before I have the chance
to admire what I will lose

I'm the fire that reigns deep within
the falling debris of a kingpin's skid row
though my silver tongue charm remains
There is nothing else I'd rather be
so accept that rain will fall
from the serenity you inspired

So before we learn to despise
can we find some leverage
in a land where the ocean blankets the past?
Dreaming of a lost New Years Day
where waking up is just an excuse
to hear your voice again

Reviews

[Richard]

Wow, it's deep it's dark it's straight forward it's just what I'd want in a chinese flower maybe even in the hair of a chinese girl ... I've never been close to a chinese girl ... I want to :(
no you know, it reminded me of a long lost chameleons song :)

[KeelyJane]

Dark and sweet. Like chocolate.
I love chocolate.

[Red & Blue]

Oh la la, what have we here! ;) A dark and beautifully elegant write.
Lovely writing dear

[Annabelle Lee]

where waking up is just an excuse
to hear your voice again

That was sweet :)

[eglantine]

*You're -- first line. Other than that, I really enjoyed this piece.

[s y e]

this is a deep and dark write. very nicely written.

awesome job.

~ Noodle/

[chaotic katie]

beautiful poem! i enjoyed reading it.

[Katiya K]

I love this! It's beautiful.

[Richard]

actually it's really nice to see that because I just started reading a book called "dream of the walled city" and I was thinking damn that would be a good song title ...