Floating

From a sad day...

Why won’t the rain clouds move away and the thunder let me be?

Why does the sun not let its rays reach as far as me?

How can I make the morning breeze blow good things my way?

All I ask is that for once my happiness could stay

 

My heart is floating in the water; waves move me up and down

Without my small gasps for air, my body soon would drown

My soul is growing empty and longs to be refilled

I need to have the old things; the things my choices killed

 

No one has stayed to guide me; no one will be my light

All I have to go on is a whim what may be right

As the leaves and grass blow in the wind I’m only left to follow

Hoping the black hole under me will choose another to swallow

Reviews

[Brooke Graco]

I really like this. A very sad poem but I like how it was written. The only thing would be coma placement. I would put
As the leaves and grass blow in the wind, I’m only left to follow
Hoping the black hole under me, will choose another to swallow

but thats just a personal preference thing. I just took breaths there. I am in no way a professional writer or good at grammer.

Nice work, look forwards to reading more.