Holding Hands

For my husband

When the last flicker

    of the candle's glow has gone

When the last breathless

    sigh has sounded in the night

The last lingering kiss shared

     and the last goodnight whispered

After the I love yous

     and the see you with the sunrise

We curl together spoon fashion

     sheltering each other safely

And fall asleep

     holding hands.

Reviews

[Barbara Walker]

I like your descriptions, they are gentle and harmonious. You see two people in your mind's eye, because your imagery is right on. I love the lines-We curl together spoon fashion, sheltering each other safely and fall asleep holding hands. Though your end stops and sentence placement help guide the reader in this particular poem, puncuation is never out of fashion. And it helps the reader to slow down a bit more and really enjoy the poem.
When the last flicker
of the candle's glow has gone,
when the last, breathless
sigh, has sounded in the night,
the last lingering kiss shared
and the last goodnight whispered;
After the I love yous
and the, see you with the sunrise,
we curl together, spoon fashion,
sheltering each other safely
and fall asleep
holding hands.

A beautiful, gentle, sweet poem. Kudos!
Barbara

[Katherine Hall]

This was beautiful. Simple, musical, and sincere.
There is something extra thrilling about holding hands with the one you love, and I think you captured that essence beautifully.
Thank you for sharing this poem with us!
~Katherine

[Flow~]

I had forgotten how endearing holding hands can be, how sweet and innocent it is. How such a simple thing can send electricity through out the human body and how the softness of another's hand can take over all other senses so that all we know that exist is the feel of our hands together. After it is all said and down sometimes the most loving human nature act is to hold hands and just enjoy each other even in silence. Lovely write~

[Crazy Cat Man]

Awwwww my favorite piece from you. Your husband is a lucky man. This poem is very sensual and romantic. :) i love it

[TamiViolet]

Although you don't know me... this is so very beautiful.....just the way love should be...
holding hands....

Thank you.

[John A Common]

Just beautiful stuff. It is so sweet and so touching,I wonder if my wife feels that way about me. Very moving poem,great job.

[deeps]

Awe! This is so wonderful and so sweet.
Such a sincere write from your heart.

[Gheeneil]

This seems to me a story of love which is filled with contentment and fulfillment. They complete each other. No storm could ever take them away from each other. Love ties them together for life. This is so sweet and so inspiring. Short it may be but it's full of substance. A great write!

[Salvatore Buttaci]

A beautiful, straight-from-the-heart love poem!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

oh this is really sweet.... I never understand people who love one another that fall asleep not touching... that closeness when drifting off is priceless... a touching write to your hubby.