I'm Not God

About a surgeon reflecting on his humanity

I'm not a god

If I were

I would save them all

Put an end to their pain

But I'm not

I'm just a surgeon 

So I'll cut them open

And stitch them up

and save all I can

But in the end

Its just not good enough

As I am just a man

I'm not God

So I can't stop death

I can put it on hold

For weeks

Maybe Years

But they would all die

Even if I wasn't here

Author's Note

I have no idea what brought this on! Please Read and Review!

Reviews

[Jim Parson]

Okay, this is very random, but then again, isn't most poetry? Although it's quite heavy, as I was reading it, it felt very light and I have no idea why. I read it again and still can't figure it out. The words are far from light, in fact they are very deep. Oh well. If I could make one tiny suggestion...I think it would flow better for me if you switched around the stitch and cut open lines...

So I'll cut them open
and stitch them up

Just seems the more natural progression to me.

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I love this, in a short poem you described so much :) Glad this was in my read requests

[Amanda_Rose]

sounds like a poem about grey's anatomy haha! i like it though, it's true, we're all going to die regardless of doctors, medicine, etc. interesting topic.

[Doreen]

Sometimes being human doesn't seem to be enough and when we realize our limit to abilities it isn't always easy. One suggestion:
and save all of them I can - and save all I can
A sad, but nice write.

[Daniel J. King]

"save all of them I can" sounds strange to me. Maybe reword that line.

This is a good subject, but it needs more imagery. The two lines "So I'll cut them open/And stich them up" are how the whole poem should read: direct and graphic.

Also, consider changing "But they would all die" to "But they will all die".

[Chelsea]

This is a creative idea for a poem. It reminds me of the MASH series based on the Korean war. Just the ache of not being able to save the souls....
I guess we do have to leave it in the hand's of God. I do believe that he can watch over the surgeons and guide them--- He's a pretty cool dude and we just gotta trust in him! Trust in him through whatever and whenever!
Well done,

[angelina]

Clear and simple, yet beautifully written. I love the way it holds so much impact. I love it!

[Nicaushio Yamaki]

Very good keep up the good work!!!

[Goodbye]

this is making me cry! :'(
Very deep :)

[Luchia Noname]

wow i love this it is so full of heart nicely done

[lJ french]

wow this is really good great job on it and very true