lilith

proving you can't always trust

w***e of babylon, seducer of man
beguiling with your web of lies
bride of satan, destroyer of love
i journeyed with you to the bridge of sighs

purveyor of evil, messenger of fate
no man can endure your cruel, black heart
b***h of the underworld, queen of the damned
i gave you my soul and you ripped it apart

temptress of ages, tormentor of fools
deception is your killing blow
betrayer of innocence, angel of falsehood
i payed the ultimate for loving you so

mistress of mayhem, bringer of woe
man's servitude is your eternal bliss
goddess of darkness, princess of perversion
brought about my damnation with a poisonous kiss

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

Aha! It's all your fault. (I was wondering what inspired BR to want to anally violate Lilith) :-D I'm sensing a bit of rage in this piece...just a touch. Maybe be a little less ambiguous with your feelings in future, give us a shot at figuring out what the emotional inspiration was for a piece? Thanks ;-)

[quinfinn]

go back to my much older postings, kimmer, much less ambiguous. thanks for reading me

[KAOlmsted]

I really should have a different color font for sarcasm ;-) My pleasure, quin.

[quinfinn]

sometimes i am rather thick, it is my current emotional state

[DIVYA]

Gret work quinfinn! I always believe that there are two sides to Woman. You have brought out the damning side extremely well... She can be all of what you wrote and more...demanding not only your servitude but all the very last dregs of your life blood and your soul!
Harsh words aptly used! I liked it a lot!

[quinfinn]

i never enjoy pointing out a person's flaws, but this one was just rife with evil and cruelty...thank you so much for reading and commenting. she didn't like this poem...i can't imagine why

[MOON]

Oh dear , slay her with words ! Great to the point write.

[quinfinn]

cruel words for a cruel b***h, basically. thank s for reading.

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

I think I dated that girl when I was a teen. I wish I could have sent her this poem the day I finally escaped her. Good work here. I would call this a severe toungue lashing. You will be the spokesman for many a divorsed man. Every divorce lawyer should have to memorize this and read it in court.

[quinfinn]

oh, she has made her rounds in this world...and still out there, beware!

[Mehak Mushtaq]

haha I like this one. Wicked.

[quinfinn]

awesome, thank you!

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Anytime. :)

[AlchemicPlutonian]

Great throwback to Revelation, beautiful.

[quinfinn]

thank you very much

[Baby Ricochet]

Dude, I want to f**k her sweet little a*s so bad. You know evil p***y is the best kind

[AlchemicPlutonian]

Can I thumbs up this review for you?

[quinfinn]

absolutely and absolutely

[David Scott]

You have betrayed her secret. Yet few will heed your warning. Men will fall in line to be castrated for the promise of knowing her power. Your words will echo in the empty halls of the innumerable broken hearts.
Oh, I think you nailed it!

[quinfinn]

aha! i see you have met our darling Lilith! she who has all the power and will kill you proving it....thank you David

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Wow, remind me not to ever get on your bad side. Excellent wicked piece. :)

[quinfinn]

how could any man write such a poem about you, Neva? there is too much beauty in your heart! thank you for your comments....

[Annabelle Lee]

beautiful poem. ugly subject haha.

[quinfinn]

yes, she really was ugly (inside) thank you for visiting!

[kublakhan27]

Wow there hasn't been much middle ground lately, which is perfectly fine haha This certainly strikes me as a mirror image to your previous two or three though...

[quinfinn]

oh, pay attention...i'm on a roll! thank you for dropping by!

[kublakhan27]

Haha no problem