Cherubim

Just when darkening clouds covered my world,

Broken. I’m made whole by your solacing word.

You light up black skies, my path when I’m blinded.

The bright light of life you generously handed.

You spread your shining wings to blow away my gloom.

From Heaven’s Gate you descended to kiss away my doom.

 You raise me up when I am down.

You make me smile when I do frown.

But now time has gone and everything is different.

How come the lofty cherub become so poignant?

Wingless.

I watch you fall for I am helpless.

Wingless.

I watch you fall for I am utterly useless.

I want to reach out but you’re so distant.

If this is parting, God! Why so instant?

Was the “cherub” I once knew a flimsy façade?

Why the heavenly face I knew become so odd?

Your heartwarming air turned so cold

And I feel so bad I can’t give you something to hold.

Why did it vanish, your pleasant mien?

Am I the cause? Did I become so mean?

I know I’m flawed and I know I’m repugnant

If that is the cause then I want this to be blunt:

If my obnoxious being corrupts that of yours,

I’ll leave your life then with all remorse.        

And from afar I will ever be contented

To see you rise as you are intended.

My little cherub, your wings I restore.

Fly my little cherub, shine brightly once more! 

Reviews

[StoryTailor]

Oh wow. This is a sad little story.
You certainly like your end rhyme! Though I am of the firm belief that end rhyme simply has a cutesy feel to it no matter who does it or why. (Although it's been disproved before and I do believe this might be one of those times)

You used wonderful adjectives to try and describe the emotions and the tumult, but some of them seemed to be more... forced, in a way.

For example: "pleasant mien" and "become so mean"

Especially seeing as a "mien" is a person's look or manner... doesn't really depend on someone else being "mean"

^^ of course-- this is all just my opinion, someone else might think that it's a wonderful use of the word. And you did use some words that were just beautiful.

My favorite part was definitely...

"Wingless.
I watch you fall for I am helpless.
Wingless."

-- Although I must admit it's because of the repetition, I'm a sucker for repetition. I've always loved it, and I think I always will!

All in all, a very beautifully written poem telling a tragically beautiful story.
I hope you write more!

[Black-Draped]

great piece it's very deep and very reel in different ways!!! =3

[Jack Isaac]

{first impression] your center line really catches the eye and invites the reader, whom, by the way, won't be disappointed. However, one might be confused in what you are intending to say. This could be just your style, which is then done very well, but I sense you want to say something else but can't. Maybe we'll see that in your next poem. Good job.