Ambushed by Silence

This was inspired by the 10 word challenge- I had to write a poem incorporating- "vase,water drop, throat,pollen,stain,ambush,wood,casualties,surprise,silence"..phew!..it sure was good anecdote to "writers block"

 

The wilted flowers

In the stained wood vase

Trying to soak in the last water drop

No pollen or humming bees

Looking at them I feel

A constriction in my throat

A sudden ambush of faded memories

I look back in surprise

At the casualties my emotions have suffered

And silence reigns

A desolate silence that resonates inside.

 

Reviews

[RHEA CROSLEY]

So gentle and beautiful presentation of grief or loss. My wife died in December 2007 and I have had much help from good people and have learn to deal with the pain. I will always have moments though when something I look at tells me of my loss. These are beautiful pictures you have chosen that in themselves say so much. Thank you for sharing your talent.

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Well done! This is an exceptional write, considering the constraint of the ten words.

[Phil Sanders]

I love it ... simple and so powerful emotively....

[Carole]

A beautiful poem, Raj! The imagery and pictures-astounding...Our emotions do indeed suffer casualties. We would not be human were it not so.

I couldn't help but think of some perennials in my garden that I transplanted that I have been working to revive. If a novice were to look at them a few weeks ago, they would have said, "They are dead-don't waste your time." And yet, I have been diligent to water them daily and cut away the dead branches and they are doing well. In time they will be flourishing beautifully. I couldn't help but think that when a broken heart is healed it is healed from the inside out. It takes time for it to be seen on the outside but with a constant nurturing, even we can flourish-no matter what may appear on the outside.

Though I sense a sadness in this write-I can't help but think of the utter beauty in silence and solitude. The inner tranquility that so many of us strive for and crave in the sea of life. You did a wonderful job using each of the words and incorporating them into this poem. I would say you have met your challenge. Well done, my friend, well done! :-)

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This is nothing short of brilliant, not only have you met the challenge but you have made perfect sense putting this together...BRAVO!!! Love the pictures, they create the mood of the piece...word placement is great...can't fault it , it is all there,
Kudos for what has become expected use of text from you.
Helen :-)

[Brette Medb]

The last line is very deep with strong emotion behind it. The whole of the poem made me see so many images and feel so bereft and torn inside. I loved the way you used the image of a stained wooden vase but the absence of bees to pollenate the flowers. It gave me the feeling of a tainted and forgotten soul, that may not have been your original intention but that was what I got out of it. I liked how you spun this and the last two lines were perfect. Great write,

Brette