The Price of Hiding

The Price of Hiding

A Poem by Denise Deas

May be disturbing, maybe not.


The Price of Hiding by Elon Raelliin Clarke

There was that time

When things were fine

Or so I Thought

To myself

Then I realized

My mask

Was applied

So perfectly

Then one day I fell

And it cracked

I worried everyone would see

The worst inside of me

So I ended

Before I was exposed

I closed my eyes

As I lay in the puddle

Of Liquid Life

Ha. Now no one can see.

© 2010 Denise Deas

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Author's Note

Denise Deas
PLease PLease, i know and get immensely better with your reviews and critiques and criticism.

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This is certainly a well written poem.
More imagery, like in your previous poem Waterfall, would have helped the raw emotions come through.

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Added on April 4, 2010
Last Updated on April 4, 2010
Tags: suicide, hiding, failure, Kidding myself, inner, thoughts


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Wotcher. Call me whatever as long as it's respectful. I love writing and when an idea comes to me i just go with it. I don't edit much. If you read something of mine, please review it. Even if you.. more..

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