A Poem by Denise Deas

It. Is. Hot

It's 5:29
It's rather sweltering
It's time to close my eyes
It's time to just think
It's 5:30
Sweat won't cease
The room is stuffy
For some reason
Unbearably so
The walls 
They seem 
to close in
On every side
Still 5:32?
My breathing heightens
Now 5:34
I sit up in a panic
the ceiling above
It's red
Still 5:34
Since when
was there color
Anywhere in my room?
The black cloud
leaving my room 
Bare and Empty
That's when i screamed
I shot up in bed all alone 
Stifling heat means madness
It's too damn hot. 

© 2010 Denise Deas

Author's Note

Denise Deas
It's hot.

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Great job. I like the use of time in this poem, and building of tension. Great job.

Posted 14 Years Ago

I like that. Your comment made me laugh at the end "its hot" who would have thought of that. When it gets closer and closer to summer I can't sleep at night. I open all my windows and sleep without no quilts but it is still too hot

Posted 14 Years Ago

I'm with you. I have nightmares if it's too hot while I sleep. Vivid poem. Felt like I was in the room with you. Need to jump in the pool now to cool off. Great write!

Posted 14 Years Ago

Very good description. When the heat is that hot. Time to sleep outside on the patio. I like this poem. You create a interesting tale. A excellent poem.

Posted 14 Years Ago

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Added on June 4, 2010
Last Updated on June 4, 2010


Denise Deas
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