Control

Control

A Poem by Soul Fire
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A poem about a dysfunctional relationship I had with one of my exes.He was very controlling,manipulative,abusive and a liar!

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You told me what to wear,
How to style my hair.

You told me what I could do,
and where I could go.

You told me who my friends could be,
You made me betray my family.

You lied to me,
and you retained control.

You said that you would leave,
If I didn't listen to you.

You told me how to do things.
What I could and could not do.

You hid away behind your xbox control,
You liked to control the ones around you,like your game.

I really really tried to tame you,
But I failed.

I really should have bailed.
But you kidnapped my will,and we sailed away.

You wouldn't let me tell you how you made me feel,
It was too much of a ''big deal.''

You were so controlling it made me want to squeal!

I couldn't be myself.

You put me in chains.

Our relationship was full of pains.

For me, It always rained.

You tried to tie me up with all your lies,
And when I escaped,
You let out a few gasps and cries.

I tried to say ''goodbye.''
But I wasn't strong enough.

Our dysfunction was suffocating me.
You starved me of reality.
I stayed inside my box,
tied in chains.

And when I screamed ,
You turned off the lights and said ''Sweet Dreams.''

As if I were a pet canary.

Our Relationship was pretty scary.

You tried to manipulate me to do things.
Your serpents tongue grew wings.

You are an evil young man,
You do not control me.

You do not have control.

You can go away..
Leave me alone.

Take your s**t with you,
Make it go away.

The night you said ''It's over.''
I barely cried,
Because if I stayed with you,I surely would have died.

© 2012 Soul Fire


Author's Note

 Soul Fire
This is a poem about real events.I let myself be treated this way,never settle for less than what you deserve!!!! Please Review.Hope you enjoyed.

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I will not lie. This is not your best work I've seen from you. A tad of angst here, particularly in the middle, though I liked your metaphor using the Xbox controller- takes the expression 'love is a game' to a whole new meaning. Stick to metaphors and the deeper meanings you've treated me to so far- be angry, rather than lamenting.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

 Soul Fire

9 Years Ago

Okay,thank you for your review.I really appreciate it.I wrote this to express the situation I once w.. read more



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sad

Posted 8 Years Ago


Too many women allow this! Self esteem comes from within,you have to love yourself and know that you deserve the best!

Posted 9 Years Ago


 Soul Fire

9 Years Ago

thank you for the review,and that's true.
Don't worry some guys are PIGS that will never change :) lol

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

That touched my heart I love it so much :) If I was in a relationship like that I would lock him out of the house and wait until morning if a guy did that to me. 100/100

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I will not lie. This is not your best work I've seen from you. A tad of angst here, particularly in the middle, though I liked your metaphor using the Xbox controller- takes the expression 'love is a game' to a whole new meaning. Stick to metaphors and the deeper meanings you've treated me to so far- be angry, rather than lamenting.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

 Soul Fire

9 Years Ago

Okay,thank you for your review.I really appreciate it.I wrote this to express the situation I once w.. read more
Relationship suffering is optional. I'm glad you were able to get out of it:) And I think I gree with Relic Poems, it's best not to sacrifice the flow and the thought of the poem for rhyming scheme.Thank you for sharing..

Posted 9 Years Ago


Mary Ann M.

9 Years Ago

agree**
 Soul Fire

9 Years Ago

Thank you for your review :D
Mary Ann M.

9 Years Ago

You're very welcome dear:)
I love this so much! Excellent job!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

 Soul Fire

9 Years Ago

Thanks!
Your serpents tongue grew wings.

Posted 9 Years Ago


So glad you got away from that pathetic excuse for a boy. Good for you. I enjoyed the emotion you expressed in your poem. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


 Soul Fire

9 Years Ago

Thank you :D
I really like this, Raya! It's so sad to know that this happened to you. I've always been warned about guys such as your ex boyfriend. You are right, he doesn't have the control over you. Sometimes they're too strong for us to fight back! But soon the war is over, when they call the relationship off. I'm sure you were happy that he said "It's over". I would've been too! It really sucks when a guy can make you lie to your parents, hurt you, and much more harsh treatments. You really didn't deserve any of that, girl! I'm glad that you finally broke away from him. Great job, bravo! I like the pure anger and raw emotions put into this poem :D

Ashley Rivers-- Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

 Soul Fire

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much ashley!
Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect

9 Years Ago

You're very welcome!! :)

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