Quietus

Today is my moms birthday. 1964-2013.

Today, as the clock strikes twelve, 

I am thrust through starlight and nebulas 

back to an era long since past, 

where freedom rang from the sky above 

and your voice was the very foundation beneath my feet, 

your long, slim fingers grasped my hands, 

lifting me from perdition into light, 

again I am swept away into memory, 

as once again you lifted me up, 

instead in this moment it was to cheers 

and tears fell down your cheeks in pride, 

violently I am ripped from peace, I remember, 

the consistent clicking of machines and staff scurrying by, 

anxious, waiting, pacing, 

then relief so brief filled my heart as yours continued on, 

but in finality, I stumble into the darkness, 

 your heartbeat beating on so slowly 

that I felt mine would stop if a moment of silence passed, 

and suddenly I am choking, I am pleading for air and life 

while reaching for those long, slim fingers that once lifted me up, 

I crash, and I am fallen.

by Brittany Zedalis in Dead Snakes Poetry 

Author's Note

http://deadsnakes.blogspot.com/2015/07/brittany-zedalis-two-poems.html

Reviews

[Nila M.]

I really love how you used the images of space and stars to evoke a sense that we have a very particular point in time in which we exist. At least that's how I felt reading it. As if it's difficult for souls that long for the eternal to exist through these temporary situations. I found this very well written and definitely expressing emotion.

[Brittany Zedalis]

Thank you so much! This is a hugely important poem to me. I wrote it on my mother's most recent birthday in memory of her.

[Nila M.]

Very well done, and very touching.

[LeslieNoel]

What a very eloquent and beautiful poem.

[Brittany Zedalis]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.

[Neville]

What we have here is a genuinely moving little gem of a poem that in its own desperate way, is a tribute to a much loved & likewise missed mom....N

[Brittany Zedalis]

This December will make 4 years since she died, and I still feel her loss with every breath I take. Thank you for reading.

[Sami Khalil]

"a moment of silence passed,
and suddenly I am choking, I am pleading for air and life"

[Brittany Zedalis]

Thank you for taking the time to read.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...............

[Pryde Foltz]

To feel someone's love so completely is one of the greatest gifts ever bestowed on another … you are very fortunate to have had such love; its beauty stays with your for a lifetime; you will never lose it, never. Fantastic write, B:)

[Brittany Zedalis]

Thank you for such a heartfelt response.

[Edis Radoncic]

"I am pleading for air and life while reaching for those long, slim fingers that once lifted me up, I crash, and I am fallen". What a brilliant write! Your mom would be proud of this. RIP.

[Brittany Zedalis]

Thank you very much.

[An owl on the moon]

Your words awaken us all to this painful place in you, these reflections of your past, your precious mother slipping from you into this darkness. And I know that these hurting memories will rise, as well as every loving, beautiful memory in you in days and years to come. She is alive in you, and your precious, beautiful words let us see glimpses of your wondrous love.

[Brittany Zedalis]

I was going to respond to this earlier but this site wouldn't let me for some odd reason.
Thank you so much for such a wonderful response. This one just poured out of me on her birthday. I miss her very much and she is one of the main reasons for why I continue to write. She always encouraged me to keep writing.

[An owl on the moon]

May her precious memories keep you always inspired, and always filled with the joy of writing; of creating. I do so miss my mom as well.

[Brittany Zedalis]

Yeah, losing her has been hard. It's been almost 2 years now and I can't believe it. It still feels like just recently.

[Sami Khalil]

A fitting tribute that will echo through eternity and lift up the ones left behind to find hope and solace. All rich blessings...:)......

[Brittany Zedalis]

As I was hoping it would be. Thank you, friend.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)....................

[Bluefire]

Amazing journey, and to know it's real and that you have endured it is amazing in itself.
Well played! ^^

[Brittany Zedalis]

Thank you for this (:

[Bluefire]

No problem =3

[Julia Mars]

Luna, such a beautiful and painful poem dedicated to your Mom's memory. xo

[Brittany Zedalis]

Yep, that it is, haha. Usually it takes time for me to write ones like this down, but this poem nearly wrote itself with how I was feeling that day. Thank you for taking the time to read it.

[Julia Mars]

Sometimes the feelings pour not just in tears but in ink, words, poems.
It's a great outlet. :)

[Brittany Zedalis]

Indeed, it is. I don't know where I would be without poetry and literature.