IMMORTALS

IMMORTALS

A Poem by Rene Velez

A MAN WALKS INTO AN OLD DARK
SEEDY PUB IN NEW YORK, HE WALKS
TO THE BACK AND JOINS ANOTHER MAN
SITTING AT A TABLE:

Time: Today,

DARIUS:
As soon as I turned the corner
it hits me like the hottest steam
in a Russian sauna, but i thought
it could not be, the oldest of friends
has come back to me, it has been
long my friend...

ALEXANDER:
Tis' true a surprise what time will unveil
but I have changed little I still drink my ale
What have you of tales? I have left mine
with wooden sails and foolish glories of
a Holy Grail...
oh what a time the Conquests of Alexander
the pillages,the treasures and the laughter
and the women of holy law raped and ravaged
then turned of common wife to daily w***e.

DARIUS:
You have not changed my friend
the days of glory have come to an end
these strange days are hard to man
today men rule of pen and not of hand
today men move in silence with private plans
they fight for money and not of land

ALEXANDER:
Aye, we have been cursed of days
all will go but we must stay
we have been written for different ways
from all that I've seen these are the
darkest days...

DARIUS:
I must bid you farewell old friend
but a gift before I go, kept safe but old
and given to me for his life I did defend
A Shakespearean Quill so that your past
days will never end...

THE MAN TURNS AND WALKS OUT OF THE PUB...

© 2015 Rene Velez


Author's Note

Rene Velez
the characters "Alexander the great" and "Darius the 3rd"...

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A very good story. Your words are true. World was more violence when Alexander roamed the land. I like the conversation and the situation of this poem. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
"I must bid you farewell old friend
but a gift before I go, kept safe but old
and given to me for his life I did defend
A Shakespearean Quill so that your past
days will never end..."
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


I am lost as to who the characters are but I confess I am not as well versed as I should be in poetic history. This is a remarkable piece though, no doubt and a fine read.

Posted 12 Years Ago


um not good at guessing but nice poem i loved it !:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


i like the story in this poem; the beginning sets the image just right, i loved and enjoyed these lines that Darius speaks:
"these strange days are hard to man
today men rule of pen and not of hand
today men move in silence with private plans
they fight for money and not of land"
... really great write i like how you wrote it from Darius to Alexander.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Interesting. I love the conversation swapping form and the imagery. The old english language is captivating as well. Nicely done Rene.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I positively love your take on the imagery of old town cratics scenery and clear descriotive mists, well done, great read.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is a fantastic commentary on the system built for life today... and great parallels from the time when the Greeks and Romans ruled and now Wall Street...

I wish... oh so much that you had given names to each of the men in the conversation... but I guess the point was made just the same.

Posted 12 Years Ago


very interesting yet very enjoyable nicely done [:

Posted 12 Years Ago



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