Ascension Of The Fallen

One of my imaginary stories that I'm working on.

 

 

 

 

The Angel...

 

    .                                         

  .                                  

   .                              

    H                         

  a                  

  d             

   

        F   

         a

              l

                  l

                      e

                          n

                                 .

                                     .

                                          .

 

...In Love          

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 Then, He Was Given Choices To Make

 

Somehow

 

He Made A Choice Which He Truly Regrets

 

Tried To Change His Fate

 

His Decision Earned Him Damnation

 

 

 

 

 

 

 Heaven Refused To Accept Him...

 

 

...And Now...

 

 

...Hell Is Fearing That He'll Take Over

 

 

 

 

 

He Threatens To Destroy Everything

 

That Were Created To Serve

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The Never-Ending War Between Heaven And Hell

 

The Epic Battles That Have Been Going On For Centuries

 

 

 

All Of Sudden, It Was Put On Hold

 

Because The Fallen Angel Became Far Worse

 

Than Both Heavenly Angels

 

And Hellish Demons

 

 Ever Will Be

 

Combined...

 

 

 

 

 

Now, For The First Time Ever

 

They All Are In It Together

 

 

On The Hunt For The Most

 

 

               Renegade...

 

 

...Rogue...

 

 

...Ruthless               

 

 

Fallen Of All Time

 

 

 

 

 

He Believes He Overpaid His Due

 

And He Wants His Revenge 

 

For It Was All In The Name Of Love...

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Let me know what you really think, honestly. I guess I really do need some of the encouragements before I go any further, so I don't feel like I'm wasting my time.

Reviews

[Legion]

I like the way you formatted this. All over the place like an angel falling and trying to take flight. Kudos on that. As for the write itself, you have an interesting idea but I think you sell yourself short by limiting your vocabulary on this. Get yourself a dictionary and a thesarus and look at what you have written already. Then use the two to improve on what you have done. This is something I did years ago when I first began writing and it has helped tremendously. It is good, don't get me wrong on that, but I think you can make this remarkable if you try a little more. Kudos.

[THAT is a matter of opi..]

Great! Very dark very sinister. Waste of time? I think not. If this was a waste of time for you then.... well.... I can't think of any clever analogies so
/insert clever analogy there

[deeps]

I think this is one of my faves here.
This is so awesome!
Wonderful read here i love the pics you used as well.

[Sean M. Addams]

this was awesome man.... so much going on all at once.... kind of speechless on what to say but this was very well done and truely one of epic portions .... nice job on this!!

[Sean Eddingfield]

I like it. Have you ever read M.S. Lay's work? He has a series going called "The Fallen." I think you would enjoy it. But anyway, nice poem.

[Ahmad Alhour]

Interesting combination of horror and story telling!
I would rather say it would be nice if it was an opening for some kind a movie! - just a thought...
It's very nice...

Keep it up.

[ANNA]

I sorry to say but if you wasted your time!!! That is f*** good wasted of time!! I mean
I have not ever seen someone eles write this, then again we may never know but you put forth something I can't even begain to share. I love the style of the begining! that's crazyy. I really think it caught my eyes and many others as well. I wish I could have wrote thing. Although, I would have do something not worthy of what you have wrote!!! Awesome and stunning..So much to this piece!!! Time spent was worth it my friend!! Snap...Snap!!

Much respect,
Anna

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WOW! This is so aweosme, I like this write alot...Kim

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Well, you are definitely NOT wasting your time on this. Powerful descriptions, strong imagery. I like the formatting, very unique. I'm in love with this, please continue. It's going in my favorites.

[Deborah Shepard]

great format

[Colleen C Dunphy]

I really like this. I love the formatting as well. It draws the eye down with the angel.
"All in the name of love" its wonderful.
You are most certianly not wasting your time.

Best, Lee