An angel's love ~ (softly sensual)

English [Shakespearean] Sonnet

           

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           Across my fields of wonder … drifting by,

            like ribbons floating through a wispy dream,

            a nymphette whispered soft my name ~ a sigh;

            'twas there she stood inside a golden beam.

            Her verdant eyes shone like a polished gem,

            with sparkling glints that hypnotized my soul,

            and (somehow) I was drawn deep into them

            in such a way I knew I'd been made whole.

            

Faint sounds of crystal waters dancing by,

            on velvet mossy banks she lay me down.

            She taught me love there 'neath a blushing sky,

            then wrapped us warm inside her pure white gown.

            

She took my breath and breathed it back in me;

            that instant knew ~ she'd set my spirit free.

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     Richard W. Jenkins

                ©2015                                                                                                       

Author's Note

Painting: "Aire" … acrylic on canvas, by Manuel G. Avendaño

Constructive critique is always appreciated.

Reviews

[kitty]

I agree with the writers slant on this piece. Softly sensual I'd say ~ Upon the banks of yonder Avon in Stratford a bard did lie. He thought of nothing else as pairs of swans go passing by: a lovely maiden he had wooed, appeared across the golden sky. . .and then that angel burst the bubble and drifted silently up above ~ i do now wonder why!

[Richard🖌]

Ahhh, Sweet Kitty🌸
With such sweeping wonder and delight, your poetic words embrace and cuddle my appreciatively stirred warmth … your review rivals the scintillating beauty of this endearing Sonnet.

Smiles 'n hugs to thee for such a gift, Lovely Poetess! ⁓ Richard ; )

[kitty]

Ah to be on that river bank as fluffy clouds go drifting by and nonchalantly take in the ambiance of the place is an experience to be desired. Your presence on this page is greatly appreciated M'Lord!

[Jade]

Such a lovely piece here, Very poetic as well. nicely written

[Richard🖌]

Hi again, Brandie🌻
You seem to favor the English Sonnets a bit, and who could blame you for that.

Thank you for reading another of my humble pieces, and for your encouraging compliments that brightened my day! ⁓ Richard : )

[marilyn 1225]

you have skill in writing sonnets that are so authentic in the style of Shakespeare... you are highly immersed and use your great feelings of love, exuberance, solace and much more in all that you write
i like all of your sonnets so far...

[Richard🖌]

With a gentle touch, you please, caress, and 'rouse my senses, Dear Lady-Poet.
Higher or more encouraging praise I could not have received from a poetess of your caliber.

I'm stunned … thank you warmly, Marilyn ⁓ Richard : )

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Richard,
"An angel's love" just is a flowing and glistening tale of softness and comfort. I see it is a sonnet and I have never written one so this was a joy to read. I like your use of "glistening gem" and "shined like a polished gem". Of course the whole poem begins with this angel "was there she stood within a golden beam." Definitely many dream like phrases and the feeling of a dream is so real. All I can say is "I was impressed." Blessings to you..............Kathy

[Richard🖌]

I, too, am "impressed", Kathy!
Impressed and embraced by the wonder and beauty of your words in review to this delight little Sonnet.
I am so very pleased you found such joy and appreciation in those lovely words and lines.

You warmed and blessed me ever-so sweetly …thank you, Kathy! ⁓ Richard : )

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Well ya know it is an encouragement to learn of the inspiration within us and how we express it. That is the joy of sharing ideas and even the process of writing. I have found my self thinking more about process and it is important I think. Actually I kind of sense this within your writing. Any way thanks for the fun answer in responce to your poem-my review and have all the fun with the writing process.................Blessings...............Kathy

[Richard🖌]

I like the way your mind works, Kathy … thank you for sharing your thoughts with me … hugs! ⁓ Richard : )

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Your welcome. It was a joy. Blessings.........Kathy

[Einstein Noodle]

engrossing .. i was the "man" in this one all the way through ;) softly sensual is an apt description .. well chosen words and phrases accomplished the emotions attached .. dreamy love and warmth flowing .. i am wondering if you considered a different word choice than azure? it is a well worn phrase, tho not negative in your poem .. just wondering ;) such a feel good poem worth reading over again
E.

[Richard🖌]

A most entreating review, My Friend!
I like your suggestion, Gene, and changed "azure" to "blushing". Let me know if that works alright; or, if you have a better suggestion.
Your comments and praise always encourage and gratify my hopeful efforts.

Thank you ever-so gratefully! ⁓ Richard : )

[Einstein Noodle]

yes... i think it is much better as blushing also amplifies a certain innocence into the "love scene" ... reading again was again a treat .. those moments, interactions and uniting as one takes me to a very special sacred place actually ... being in love is a wonderful thing eh!? and the picture is incredible ..it has such motion, fierceness, smooth creamy beauty .. a great match for your poem in my opinion

[B. Boileau]

A Shakespearean sonnet William himself would have been proud of. Your pen flows to page with grace in this beautifully written angelical piece. Indeed you set your readers spirits free.

bill

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Bill!
Thank you most gratefully for your choice in this piece, and for such praise and appreciation expressed of my humble effort in composing and sharing it, as-well, sharing the resulting effect it has inspired in my readers' spirits.
A bit of (interesting?) personal history: It was at the tender age of nine, my Dear Aunt Kate began my poetic journey, by first teaching me the English Sonnet; then, the forms of Blank Verse, Free Verse, and Free Style poetry, and I've loved reading and composing in them ever since.
Thank you again, My Friend … blessings to you! ⁓ Richard

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Love your dedication to form and I love the passion with which you write.. I especially enjoy the sonnets as one of my first friends here used to write them... this poem just as beautiful in sentiment: an angel made you whole and set your spirit free... gorgeous penning, Richard.

[Richard🖌]

What a sweet review for this little phantasmagoric piece, Thomas.

I used to write a lot of Sonnets, but I've gotten away from them of late, but your comments make me feel inspired to take them up anew.
May I know who your Sonneteering friend is? I'd love to read his/her work … I've come across no real Sonnet writers on the site (that is, who adhere to the true Sonnet form), though mattavelli did ask me to teach him the form, and he finally composed several perfect pieces.

Thank you so much, Thomas … I always look forward to your take my efforts! ⁓ Richard

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You are kindly welcome, Richard.

He's been out of commission for a couple of months now and hasn't been online... his page is still up though... http://www.writerscafe.org/ShaneMohamed

[Richard🖌]

I just realized you went back aways to find this one, and you were reviewing it as I was adjusting it a bit … does it appear any differently now?

[Richard🖌]

Thanks a bunch for the URL … I'll take a look-see. : )

[Alex Cook]

Very well done. I liked it a lot.

[Richard🖌]

Many thanks, Alex, for reading and liking … I bow most humbly! ~ Richard

[ANTO]

this is eloquent and quite beautiful Richard my friend - nothing more to say mate. It moved me.
:)

[Richard🖌]

Most gracious and appreciative thanks to you, Anto … you have truly brightened my smile today.
read moreMost gracious and appreciative thanks to you, Anto … you have truly brightened my smile today.
I am so very grateful you chose this little Sonnet to read, and that you found favor in it … blessings, my friend! ~ Richard

[Roland Petrov]

Ah, you have written more sonnets! Just lovely. My only critique is that instants don't know; people do. I have no beef with poetic license, but personally I would probably have said "instantly I knew".

[Richard🖌]

A million thanks, Roland, for reading and commenting on one of my humble little Sonnets, and for the gratifying praise.

Of course, you well know (as do we all) the meaning is that it was me who in "that instant knew" … everyone knows an instant cannot know such a thing. :)

To use the words as you propose would throw the iambic beat of the Sonnet rhythm off.
"INstantLY i KNEW" would begin the line trochaic and ran the HARD beat of KNEW and SHE together.

I am sure it could have been said differently and kept that line in proper beat; give me a bit of time to work on it and we'll see if I can't come up with something more suitable for you.

Thank you again, my new friend … blessings! ~ Richard

[Roland Petrov]

You're right! I was scratching the bottom of the barrel to find something to criticize; the poem's so perfect, it's all I could come up with. Am thoroughly enjoying your sonnets.