BEHIND CLOSED EYES... (a sensuous touch)

Parabolic Quatrain

Author's Note

"Parabolic Quatrain"
An original form created by
Richard W. Jenkins © 27 June 2010

Five Quatrains in lines of 8-count each, with the beginning of each line indented right one click more below the title from line 1 through line 10, and one click left indent left from line 12 through line 20, with lines 10 and 11 of equal indent, creating a smooth parabolic presentation.
Rhythm/Meter is in iambic tetrameter.
Rhyme Scheme: abab, cdcd, efef, ghgh, ijij.

Painting: Courtesy of Wikimedia Commons

All well-intended critique is welcomed and appreciated! : )

Reviews

[David Scott]

The parabolic format is a very nice touch here.
I see: the bend in the river, the curve of an eye lid,the small of a woman's back, lips curling in a gentle smile, the bowing out of one soul to touch their lover's soul at climax...
And on and on. I valuable tool in this poem. Too often the format is rather random and does not add to the construct of emotion and thought of the write.

Now, the vocabulary and phrasing were like the river in the painting. You paint a quiet depth with your words. There is a place to rest, or float in the experience. Yet, water is persistent and powerful. It can only be directed, and never fully contained.

Oh how I long to be in her arms and see the bliss we shared when our eyes were closed and our vision pure love...
I don't know what weather to be happy or sad... Maybe a spectrum of emotions are mixed into a cocktail of memories inebriation as I contemplate your art here.

Lovely write Richard.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you ever-so gratefully, David, for such a rich, complimentary, and rewarding review.
read moreThank you ever-so gratefully, David, for such a rich, complimentary, and rewarding review.

The beautifully-creative manner in which your senses have interpreted and added to this unusual form, and its verbal content, waxes poetic — matching … perhaps, even eclipsing the poem itself.

That my humble efforts touched you in such a manner your emotions and memories were aroused … what higher and deeper gratification could a hopeful olde bard hope for.

Thank you again, David, and bless you your thoughtfully encouraging nature, My Fine Poet Friend! ⁓ Richard

[David Scott]

My pleasure indeed. A very inspirational read for me.

[J.J. NIGHTINGALE]

I miss David Scott..................................

[Jennesis]

The sensuality of every peace of this is exquisite. From the visual curve of the words to the background, it all leads the reader to a lovely sensually erotic adventure. Lovely~

[Richard🖌]

Well, howdy, Dear Jenn!
It is so-so very nice to see you've stopped-in to read this unique little piece, leaving such elegant praise and sweetly-worded recognition of its more passionate, arousing aspects, as-well, the adventurous presentation.

Smiles 'n warmest thanks to you, Jenn … I am truly happy you came by! ⁓ Richard

[Chris]

I've a melting foot of snow outside - here I FEEL the Spring. A soft and mellow bit of contentment.

Chris

[Richard🖌]

Thank you so very much, Chris, for gracing my poem!
May your coming Spring fill you with contentment, as your words have me … by their gracious beauty.
Bless you, My Fine Friend! ⁓ Richard

[R.M.C]

I don''t know how meaningful my review could possibly be when I'm Ignorant in comparison to your overwhelming knowledge, and lacking in your evident talent, but such a great poem demands a response. The wording is very smooth, the words flowing off the tongue like water. And like water, its pure and used in a tranquil and beautiful effect. I like that you haven't tried to over complicate it and yet it still holds a very sophisticated and in depth air about it. I also like that you haven't tried to stretch the poem out to extend a stanza or more longer; you've expressed enough and have managed to leave it on a climax, making the reader really think about what you've wrote.
This is definitely the best poem I've read while I've been on this site... and one of the best I've ever read, up there with my favorites, such as Sonnet 116 by Shakespeare. I also really like the painting; I don't know if you picked it before writing or after, but it fits it perfectly.

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Dear Poet! : )
I must thank you most profusely and humbly for your in-depth words of review to this unusual poem, steeped in love and sensuality, but most of all, for selecting it to read and enjoy … for, pleasing readers is my greatest aim, as are your sentiments and understanding interpretation(s) my grateful reward.
In am very familiar with Shakespeare's Sonnet 116, and I would say you made an excellent comparison; yet, to have my work compared the The Bard's is praise far beyond any I could have possibly expected, and I am gratefully blushing, I can assure you!
The painting is one I had found and liked several years past, keeping it, waiting for just such a poem to bond with … I am so very pleased you approve.
I see you've posted novels, My Fine New Friend; I regret that I am not qualified to review and critique books, stories, and novels … this is a genre of writing beyond my skills. You mention that you are a hopeful poet, and I will be most willing to give any of your poems my very best effort — as you have mine.

Your enjoyment, appreciation, meaningful words, and approval mean everything … thank you again, Ross! ⁓ Richard

[R.M.C]

It was a pleasure to read your work, I assure you. I'll be sure to ask for your insight into any of my poems that I feel are at least partly worthy of your time.

[Richard🖌]

It will be my delight … thank you again! : )

[Richard🖌]

Meanwhile, Ross, I've several sonnets posted here you might enjoy, if you've ample time and urge.

[R.M.C]

Thanks, I'll be sure to have a look.

[emmajoy]

This is exquisite. The fragility of the graphic could either outplay or fade within another person's words, but in spite of using a discipline you've phrased a time and event so elegantly, emotionally and yet warmly. Thank you for sharing such a form.. a lesson learned, yet again.

[Richard🖌]

Dearest Em,
The praise, feeling, and sentiments expressed for this unique piece, from such an accomplished poetess of your caliber, envelopes and warms the entirety of my being, far beyond that which I could have ever wished; for this, I sincerely gift you my most profuse thanks!
My intent with this form is to please both the eye and mind's-eye of my knowing readers … your generous and lovely words (a poem in themselves) have assured me I, indeed, have!
Bless and keep Thee safe and well … my warmest thanks! ⁓ Richard : )

[DIVYA]

Nature and love are oft-repeated in their correlation yet this poem is set apart in my heart for its masterful narration, perfect rhyming and exquisite imagery. The sensual touch is subtle and enhances the feelings expressed. Much appreciated and enjoyed.🌷

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Dear Divya … thank you ever-so warmly for the lovely flower! : )
It is truly wonderful of you to select this poem of sensual tenderness to read and review … I am truly honored and joyful you have.
The beauty of your mind, heart, and soul shines forth from your knowing words of appreciation and understanding of the meanings contained within this rare form.
The touch you left has warmly blessed my day and brightly gratified my humble efforts.
Thank you kindly and appreciatively, Lovely Lady-Poet! ⁓ Richard 🌺

[DIVYA]

You are most welcome Richard. I am grateful for the sheer beauty of your thoughts and words.

[DIVYA]

And I am in love with the stunning presentation and shape of the verses. You create such magic with your pen.

[Richard🖌]

Divya,
From such expressed sentiments and feelings as yours, my pen is inspired to dance in my fingers⁓*

[softlyfall]

I love that the strict adherence to form accentuates the sensuality of the poem. I would love it if there were more waves, more verses. Lush detail but delicate. Wonderful.

[Richard🖌]

Yes, Amy,
It is alluring to settle for less, when there could be sooo much more, eh?
Thank you, M'lady, for sharing this warm little form with me, for your truly warming comments, and encouraging, gratifying praise … gracious hugs to you! ⁓ Richard

[John Ivy]

I truly love this arrangement of poem and painting. The poem is beautiful and both connect very nicely. It is through this poem that the reader wanders through the painting. I love it!

[Richard🖌]

Hi, John! : )
It is a genuine pleasure to receive your words of praise and company, as imaginations wander through the lush union of painting and verse.
Bless you with many grateful thanks, My New Friend! ⁓ Richard