Day Dream

Mind drifts across oceans and waves,

The mind carries thought through mountains and time, sights of a sunset, can be seen,

by the eye of a mind, in a daydream.

Reviews

[YouoweYoupay]

Although I had hoped this daydream journey you've taken us on would last a bit longer (=P) I thought it was inspirational. We might be poor, repressed, ill in bed, or maybe just too busy with work, kids, or spotights, but there's one thing no one or thing can take away from us. The frequent chance of closing our eyes and departing to wherever we want to be. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.

-Wella.

[emily joe]

I LOVE THIS. It's perfection. Bravo; You've inspired me.

[Fabian Franco]

This is really nice.
I think it could be a bit longer and you could find a way to make it flow better also but other than that it is great.

[Moonflower]

This is serene, illuminated by waves of brilliance, I dance on the shores of beauty and powerful dreams.

[Miss Coral]

Really like this idea- I would consider starting the second line with "carrying thought", to make it run a little smoother. Great job though. :D