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Rain On Me

Rain On Me

A Poem by Robyn

I hear the rain fall to the ground
I watch the lightning flashing
I step along the empty streets
and hear my footsteps splashing

I look around to see who's there
and only tall trees greet me
A silly smile comes to my face
My troubles are on third street

The sky gets darker with the time
The clouds are grey and gloomy
I wonder if the clouds can see
the gladness they bring to me

The clouds bring rain indeed it's true
but raindrops bring the roses
A pretty girl will grin and laugh
He loves her and she knows it

Rain starts to slow clouds leave and go
The storm gets swept to Greenville
I saw the good in all the bad
and now I see the rainbow


© 2010 Robyn


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THis was absolutely lovely.....powerfully cute...:-)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Like the girl in the poem, this made me smile too. There was a line here and there that seemed a little choppy, at least with the cadence that it fell into in my head, but overall it was a very cute and enjoyable poem. As the people before have said, the imagery was great. It really captured all of the things that I love and fascinate me about the appearance of storms. Good work!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Wow! I absolutely loved it. It flowed beautifully and kind of gave me warm fuzzy feeling. :) I also love how it sucked me in from the first verse and held me right up to the very end. The imagery is wonderful as well. All around an incredible poem. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 14 Years Ago


this is a really good write. it flowed so nicely. i especially love the ending :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


"Rain starts to slow clouds leave and go
The storm gets swept to Greenville
I saw the good in all the bad
and now I see the rainbow"

{wow--i love this poem--sweet imagery-great write}

james:-)



Posted 14 Years Ago


nice work...

a very rhytmic expression of thoughts through poetry...

Posted 14 Years Ago


yessss, it's soo fresh and enlightening, i love it! ~L

Posted 14 Years Ago


I like this one. and I've been to Greenville. It's a lovely little town.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I agree, it flowed all over me, just like a rainfall.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was genuine and lovely and refreshing as the rainfall itself...i think you should use more apt punctuation marks and grammar though to add more finesse to an already lovely voice.

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Added on June 1, 2010
Last Updated on July 22, 2010
Tags: rain, storm, lightning, overcome, alone, rainbow

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Robyn
Robyn

Berea, OH



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