Song of Man

A Sonnet for Sami. :)

Harken! Look ye unto the heavens above:
Angels with raised voices: she reverberates sound
Of graceful beauty, hope and lightness abound,
Communion, all joyous souls filled thereof,
Have lifted them wrapped in wings soft as the dove
Of interior thoughts. We cling to the ground;
Oh! rise us up, circle us again around
And teach us grace, loyalty, humbleness, love.
Thine spirit like the Sun, immersed in thy heat;
Whom hadst a melody and voice that doth shine:
True as the childish heart, innocent, supine,
To tarry your way along life's chosen path,
In ambiguous intent; though yet hearts beat
The seeds of unrest in thine breast men do hath.

Author's Note

Classic Italian style, iambic pentameter.
This is an 11 meter per line piece. Both 10 and 11 meter are accepted in this format. Proper emphasis on the five syllables per line.
Standard 14 line.
a b b a a b b a
c d d e c e

Reviews

[clisa]

I am so impressed with anyone who can write a sonnet. I have tried to tackle it and I get bogged down in the rhyme and the meter. One thing you may want to try - write a sonnet in modern language - leave out the ye,Thine,whom,harken,tarry,hath and all other language of antiquity. I think it would be wonderful for a modern audience to come to love sonnets but this antiquated language might get in the way.

[Rogue]

I agree. My voice gets lost under all the antiquated and flamboyant prose. This is why I don't normally do this type of piece. Though I am quite capable of it. However, I wanted to do this in a style as authentic as possible.
Thank you for your thoughts on it and review. :)

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. I'm in total shock. This is a precious gift dear kind lady that I will take to heart and soul. You are a great friend and gentle soul. This is a heavenly write and I truly appreciate all the encouragments and support you give me and others on this site... I love this a lot. You know the gift I gave you too...
May your light and gentle spirit keep gracing all of us...
Many and many thank yous...:)

[Rogue]

I am happy you liked it. I engineered it both to your spiritual and philosophical. :)
May your light always shine brightly, Sami. :)

[Sami Khalil]

I love it. I appreciate it immensely... Excellent work too..:)