Affairs of the Heart

loosely generalized observations ;)

Affairs of the Heart

For every man

who wins her heart

A man stands in shadows

torn apart

For every woman 

who finds her man

three are broken

unable to stand

Sunrise could not find him in  heart's shadow

No sharper edges wrought to cleave those bindings;

locking the pain with loss and despair

another had won her love. 

disregard replete; he moves

one to another, another; and another 

now in bliss, remiss of those memories,

he weds while broken stems alter Sunrise

no longer kissing their lips

hands only brushed the pearl of their veils now

fingered shards, shred them to shrouds 

three to cover each.

03/10/2019

E.

*the first two verses were one of those "flash inspirations" one has the tendency to think they are genius, only to throw them out when read later ..i know you all know what i mean ... but i didn't throw them out because it "felt" right .. so i added the second two verses ... trying to say the same thing in a bit different way ... would love to know your thoughts on them

Author's Note

Reviews

[Chris]

Dear Mr E. I found your poem moving. It also brought a memory back of an aunt by marriage I was very fond of. She really cared for me at a time my parents were 400miles away. I was young. She said to me to hang on to my man and look after him because there were other women round every corner waiting to prise him away. She wasn't wrong there, that's exactly what happened.

That loss is incredibly difficult to deal with, there was much pain and I sensed that in your lines you yourself understand that loss. Loving someone who doesn't feel the same way about you sucks. Sometimes you may meet someone else, but that broken trust shatters the heart and it takes one hell of a lot of glue to stick it back together.

Do not bin this piece. You have much to say here. This reader fekt your words on an emotional level.

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

oh no Chris ... as i started to read your review i thought it would be a more happy story with your aunt (i had several nearby when parents were miles and miles away;) but i am so sorry for what happened to you ... no matter how long ago it never goes away .. i lost my wife to cancer when she was only 30 yrs old and working through that i often thought how much more difficult it is for those divorced and/or abandoned ... because they are still around .. and friends and family take sides .. so the emotional support given is not nearly sufficient .. many times makes things worse i think ;((( thank you so much for your very encouraging review ..i have been pretty insecure in posting and keeping it as is ... truly .. i very much appreciate your words, Chris ... God bless you and big hugs girl ... (if that's ok)
E.

[Chris]

Hugs very gratefully received. I am so sorry for your loss. Your words have a universal appeal. Loss however it comes as a result of being abandoned or through death is life changing and difficult to deal with. Your poem reaches out to those who have suffered loss. Please post more if you are able to. Sending you all good wishes and a hug from me to you.

Chris

[Rick Puetter]

Indeed, the first stanza is the strongest. The second is also strong. Altogether, however, it is an interesting and thought provoking piece. And it absolutely, and correctly, summaries lost love. The longer we are in the game, the more we lose. And we may never recover and find a satisfactory solution. Few of us are lucky enough to achieve a win and exit early from this competitive gain. But those that do make it harder for those left on the game board. I was fortunate and found a winning combination almost immediately and never looked back. But it is good to be reminded that this is not the norm. Thanks for your insightful poem.

Rick

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks for checking it out Rick! i think you are so right! it is not the norm .. one is very fortunate to find it in life and keep it ... i think those who do are examples to emulate. when initial fire turns to embers it's too easy to look somewhere else for that addictive rush ... usually it isn't there but like you say .. the breakup makes it harder for everyone involved to trust .. and find it once more .. i appreciate your kind words and for pointing out the verses you think are strong .. it helps a lot!
E.

[adornoscousin]

I think this is a brilliant line: Sunrise could not find him in heart's shadow
No sharper edges wrought to cleave those bindings

I don't know...it just grabs me. I really like the idea of the sunrise not finding someone. I am still wrestling with that second line but I love it.

[Einstein Noodle]

i always feel an extra honor when someone looks for an old poem .. thank you for taking extra time to find one that grabbed you right off .. that second line is just those men not chosen .. bound by the pain of it .. nothing sharp enough to cut those bindings ;) ...... thank you ever so much Adorn ... see you around the Cafe" eh!?
E.

[Ankita Dwivedi]

Dear sir , very effectively you have portrayed love , and loss in your poem .. the first to paras hit hard ..reminded me of a guy , who was in love with me 2 years ago ..he loved me so insanely and dearly and I just couldn't love him back .. i tried .. i swear I tried to love him .. but I ended up breaking him and hated myself for it ..i miss him but hadn't thought about him for months now ..your words brought his love ..i think the honesty of your work did ..
keep safe and have an amazing day :)

[Einstein Noodle]

one of the best reviews we can get is one whose own life experience is brought to mind .. yes .. we can love ferociously to no avail ... but I would not feel to bad about not being able to love him back .. if he is a stout hearted and kind man .. he learned a whole lot feeling such passion ...and brokenness is one of our best teachers of all says i ... thanks so much for finding this one and taking your beautiful time to review ... love on ya .. love and peace and joy!
E.

[Ankita Dwivedi]

The pleasure is mine ! Love ❤️ returned

[Dave Brown]

Funny how a person comes across these older writes
You wondered about people's thoughts.
The number of readers that responded to this should give you an awfully good indication

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Dave .. i appreciate the time you took finding it and letting me know your impressions .. glad you enjoyed sir!
E.

[sette]

hi friend the heart is the voice that remains unheard though has to be listened that is what makes affairs of the heart so complex to understand but then nothing beats the power of love

[Einstein Noodle]

isn't it just so Sette? crazy untamed and sometimes quite destructive .. love your comments .. peace and joy!
E.

[Lorry]

Quite right not to throw them out Sir E, as we do know and feel what you mean, but i would get rid of the "thinking they are genius, only to throw them out later" part of your explanation, as we know you are, so there! 😀
I can still feel that dark, heavy ache of being second best and losing, where even standing up feels like too much, yet I have also known the occasional win from time to time and don't recall giving much thought to whoever took second place that time.
Your versions sound so eloquent, where mine feels petty and envy filled. As I said, genius 😀

[Einstein Noodle]

you are kind Lorry .. thank you so much! you put yourself into this one .. made it your own .. i can not be more gratified .. its what we all try to offer ain't it!? yes... being the loser cuts deeply ... and i agree .. when we have won .. that's all that matters ... what a thorough and sensitive read sir .. you felt me all the way through .. couldn't ask for more! peace and joy brother!
E.

[Intothemilkyway]

Your poem is very encouraging. It shows that if you don't treat someone with love and respect they will sure leave you one day. But also if you aren't fast enough to catch the woman be prepared for another one to have her.
Love doesn't need to be hurried. But sometimes if you don't hurry showing your feelings it will just be too late.
Just like a flower who needs care and love .If you don't water it every day it will die.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes..love is funny that way isn't it ... one must be tuned in me thinks ;) thanks again for visiting and leaving your review .. how else do we know how we are doing if no one tells us ;) love on ya
E.

[Kesch]

this is so sad really, emotional read....

[Einstein Noodle]

:( no fun to be on the loosing end of love for sure :( i am so happy you are checking out me poems kescha ... i do hope you re-open your pages and share here at the Cafe'
E.

[Eilis]

I love the contrast between the style of the first two stanzas and the second two. It’s like you have a poetic intro and then lead in to the life application of the aphorism. There’s something Shakespearean about it, but more the plays than his poetry. Perhaps a lead in to a tragedy.

Great rhythm, too. It feels like it’s written metrically, but it’s too early for me to track it, haha. Maybe you think in iambic. It certainly feels smooth in the reading.

I really liked the two first stanzas. They set the tone and I think the understanding of the overall concept hinges on the information given there, so I’m glad you decided to keep them.

Another enjoyable poem from you.

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks so much for your thorough reading of this one .. i have a strong music background that may help with rhythm .. it wasn't a focus so i am really glad that it came through for you .. thanks again .. top o' the mahrnin' to ya! :)
E.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Broken sunrises

Broken sunrises🌞
of bitter love,

Warm sunsets 🌅
are getting easier
without you Baby!

Shattered veils
of broken wedding
vows...

Became broken
glass of a fragile
Heart.

You just weren't
ready to commit
to me,

You were a free
spirit that couldn't
be tamed.

It helped me
grow up,

I saw your
soul glow.

You became
that broken sunrise
that had to fix your
fractured heart,

Thank you for
your love because
you healed me.

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2019August1


I see I've read this
piece but your poem
inspired me.

[Einstein Noodle]

love your "inspiration" Benita! its a perspective of one who lost the game eh!? thanks so much for sharing ...
E.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

Thank You my friend
Seems all my poet friends
Inspire me.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

You're welcome 😊