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Souls Surrender
******************************************************* I sat upon a moonlight ripple
that glide
refractions along
its very edge
the maiden supple recovered
the star
that dance her finger tip
sung sweetly
the light of her lyric wet
falling crescendo
into endless thrall an sail
ethereal tenderness
billowing dress
her caress the dimmer shimmer
I shiver
an evening ends
mooning
lonely
only
dreaming sweet Sara's Song *******************************************************
*** Sara ***
*********************************************************************************** Standing in the Waves
The Moon
Molds to Her Wonder Her Form Loveliness in True Knowing ... Her Feel of Loneliness ...
Magical, mystical write...It transported me from this world into one where fancy reigns supreme... Very very elegantly penned indeed! The beginning is so wonderfully mesmerizing! "I sat upon a moonlight ripple".... Wow! You weave magic through words...
"ethereal tenderness
billowing dress
her caress the dimmer shimmer
I shiver
an evening ends
mooning
lonely
only
dreaming sweet Sara's Song"
....Astonishingly brilliant...fantastic flow...like a flowing river, like a melodious song...
Enchanting write!
I almost sensed myself going into a trance and being transported into a dreamlike state there. the words just rolled off my tongue and it flows nicely. Im not too clued up when it comes to poetry but what ever it was that I was reading I liked it, read it three times. Well done indeed. A full ten out of ten for you.
There is such an enchanted feel to your words... a world of beauty comes to life in front of our eyes... Thank you for sharing such a wondrous, lifting work!
Magical, mystical write...It transported me from this world into one where fancy reigns supreme... Very very elegantly penned indeed! The beginning is so wonderfully mesmerizing! "I sat upon a moonlight ripple".... Wow! You weave magic through words...
"ethereal tenderness
billowing dress
her caress the dimmer shimmer
I shiver
an evening ends
mooning
lonely
only
dreaming sweet Sara's Song"
....Astonishingly brilliant...fantastic flow...like a flowing river, like a melodious song...
Enchanting write!
It's all about the music really. I'm a Writer / Musician. Write On / Right On!
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