Old Rusted Strings

Old Rusted Strings

A Poem by Rose Diamond
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Not my best work, but oh well!

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I am a violin
Long abandoned
By the one who loved me

I remember our first song
Shaky, unbearable, and awkward
Yet, the way she held me
The way she smiled upon hearing our first notes
How her love for me developed so quickly
Made it all worth while

She always cared
Always tightened my strings
And rosined my bow
And in return
I sang for her
I sang her the songs from my heart
Songs that only existed
When her heart beat so close to mine

I loved her
And I thought she loved me

Oh, I am such a pitiful fool

It has been three years
My strings have rusted
My bow is dry
My voice is horse
And my case is covered in dust

I should hate her
Memories of our last song should hurt me
Her smile should burn me
And her voice should be poison
I should forget her
And hope that tomorrow
She decides to let me go

But her melody still vibrates within me
And even without her heartbeat to keep time to
Her song still plays
On these
 Old
Rusted
Strings

© 2014 Rose Diamond


Author's Note

Rose Diamond
Not my best piece, but I haven't been able to think of anything to write in a while! I guess my pen hand has become old and rusty!

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This poem made me think about my neglected violin (its been two weeks since I've played it).

I could sympathize with your words all the way through. Especially on the second stanza. Though you say that this is not your best, I think that your poem accomplished the job that it was meant for: emotionally touching your reader. Bravo!

Lastly, I want to point out a minor error I ran across in your poem: "He smile should burn me" (second to last stanza)
Did you mean "Her smile should burn me"?

Overall, I enjoyed this piece.

Now, I'm going go play my violin lol :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rose Diamond

7 Years Ago

Haha! I am so blind! I'll go fix that right away xD

Thank you very much for your encour.. read more
Desiree B.

7 Years Ago

No problem



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Darn it this is how I feel towards my own saxophone!!! Your writing made me remember which is very impressive. Nice job!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautifully done. There is a sadness and neglect here that can be felt quite plainly.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This poem made me think about my neglected violin (its been two weeks since I've played it).

I could sympathize with your words all the way through. Especially on the second stanza. Though you say that this is not your best, I think that your poem accomplished the job that it was meant for: emotionally touching your reader. Bravo!

Lastly, I want to point out a minor error I ran across in your poem: "He smile should burn me" (second to last stanza)
Did you mean "Her smile should burn me"?

Overall, I enjoyed this piece.

Now, I'm going go play my violin lol :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rose Diamond

7 Years Ago

Haha! I am so blind! I'll go fix that right away xD

Thank you very much for your encour.. read more
Desiree B.

7 Years Ago

No problem

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Rose Diamond
Rose Diamond

Canada



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(Formerly Rosie-Chan) Hi there! My name is Rose, I'm 17, I love theatre, music, and literature, and I am a poet! I am literally the most inconsistent poet ever, but I'm ok I guess. more..

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