LAUGHTER LINES

Laughter Lines

 

Through polite obligation
Rude revelations
Embarrassed trepidation
An act of sheer elation
Excusing oneself from the present situation
Making an impression
An awkward confession
Testing friendship and trust
Concealing disgust
Celebrating absurdness
Distractions from sadness
An occurrence too unnerving
The diabolically disturbing
A hideous incident
 The eccentric resident
A display of defiance
A gesture of compliance
A hilarious thought, impossible to distort
Consoling the fraught
A excuse not to cry
A serotonin high
A creepy advance
An enormous grunt
After a hideous deed
A biological need
Misinterpretation Exaggeration
Resignation Consolation
Convivial Trivial
Reprisal
Survival

 

 

 

 

02/03/09 By SH

Reviews

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Loved the rhyme and flow! Each word and line transmited a great deal of feelings! 100/100 Great write!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

great comments and much appreciated

[.]

:D you're welcome!

[demureminds]

Great rhyme scheme! I felt each line with force. Well written.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

that's quite a compliment coming from you Melinda, thanks.

[Reeti]

What is most impressive about your verse is your variety of vernacular choices which blend together well by rhythm and explicative quality . And, the copious phrases reflecting ordeals are followed by a conciliatory phase in the most natural way possible. So, i must agree with you like billions of others (including the clinically depressed) that amid the hullabaloo, 'a hilarious thought, impossible to distort' is absolutely, veritably needed.

[Tai Ryens]

Brought a smile to my face, I'm practically speechless with this piece. It was so cleverly done.

[Laura Maidah]

I'm not usually a fan of rhymers. I changed my mind. Thanks for the read. It's a great one. I almost wish you had a different structure, but maybe this works.

[Ed Hart]

somewhere there just had to be a word boot camp, a place to teach words how to behave, to stand at attention, and to never ever complain...and here's the lady with the eraser

[nigrum homonculus]

a very interesting way to explain the creation of laughter lines....and oddly i can relate to it. i like this alot

[...]

This is a wonderful piece :)

[MOON]

Lovely turn of phrase , poignant and amusing laughter lines indeed!

[emmajoy]

What a wonderful piece of writing.. love the sometime tongue in cheek use of words, the style, the phrasing .. in fact, there's not one thing to turn from. You've spun feelings in life, in a time when emotions of all kinds jump out of the air!