The Five Drunks You Meet in Vegas

The Five Drunks You Meet in Vegas

A Story by Shannon
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Talking loudly, he tells his phone and most of his fellow passengers, "I got the good sessions, but the hotel isn't up to par....(snort)...Ya I'll get a few rounds in".
He laments the legroom, the air quality and the lack of drink service before takeoff, then ends his call. The Convention Attendee, a business man from some unnamed company, sporting a crumpled suit coat. Probably accustomed to taking business class and either the economic downturn, or some other individual circumstances, have lead to him being closer to the back of the plane.
He thumbs his call button, catches the flight attendant' eye, holds up his empty glass, requesting "Another". You notice flight attendant deftly switching him to doubles. She winks at you as she removes his last drink from his sleeping hand.
Convention Attendee quietly snores the rest of the trip, waking after the plane lands to stagger into the airport.

***
“Don ya jus’ hateit wan peple wearashir’ an’ prolydonevenno the ban’”, Last Decade’s Frat Boy slurs as he slumps himself next to you on a casino bench, breathing cheap beer in your face.
You quickly decipher, 'Don’t you just hate it when people wear a t-shirt and probably don’t even know the band?', as he tilts his head in the direction of a young woman with her considerable assets on display in what might be the remnants of a vintage Skid Row t-shirt.
You ponder why he might have chosen you to engage in this conversation with, as you survey your plain, dumpy, middle aged self and his aging frat boy persona, complete with backwards cap, trendy sunglasses, and beer can in hand.
Seems like a harmless conversation, so you tell him you and your husband went to see Def Leppard the night before. His eyes widen, he lifts his hand expectantly and exclaims “Dude!”.
You decide 'why not?' and give him the requested high five. He asks about other 'old rock band concerts', making you chuckle: he has no idea he has just called you old. Many of your replies are followed by a round of “Dude!” and a high five.
By the time your husband arrives, Frat Boy is sprawled out on the bench beside you. Husband has a question in his eyes, combined with familiar amusement. You tell your temporary companion you are moving on.
Frat boy leaps to his feet, surprisingly quickly, as he is pretty tipsy, raises his had towards husband: “Dude, cool wife!”. They, too, share a high five before Frat Boy head back to the flashing of the slot machines.
***
The Fremont Street Wanderer, a Vegas local or at least a current resident. He is wearing a pair of jeans, coated with a layer of brown Vegas dust, and shoes that were probably once white. You flinch when you notice he has no shirt on; he also has red, tangled curls and freckled skin. The white skin of shoulders is in danger of a serious burn in the blistering heat.
As he lurches towards you, his eyes light up “Sis’er” he mumbles, then louder: “Sister”.
You pause briefly to greet him. He tells you that you must be siblings of sorts, aren’t all red heads related somehow? You laugh, “We must have a common ancestor”. 
When Wanderer reaches for you arm, you decide its time to continue down the street. He follows you, words running together with 'sis’er' eventually becoming the only discernible. A few stores later, security personnel intercept and begin to move him on his way. He tries one last time “Sister, please look!”
You look. He his pulling the waist band down on his jeans. Sigh, why did you look? But as you turn away, you see what he is trying to show you. A birth mark that looks remarkably like the one on the elbow he tried to touch earlier, just beneath his waist band on his hip. 
“Yes, pretty well the same” you acknowledge. He smiles brightly at you and stumbles away down the street.
***
The Girl’s Weekend Away Crew, must be 6 of them. Giggling, carrying pastel colored slushy drinks. They ask if some of them can sit at your table to watch a free show just outside the bar. Of course, you agree.
One asks “Where are you from?”
You tell them, to be met with blank stares, so you add “Canada”.
“My friend James lives in Ontario!”
“Are you from Ontario?”
“She’s from Ontario?”
“That’s like an hour from where I live!”
“The Ontario in Canada, not California”.
“Oh, that’s far from where I live”.
“I love Canadians”.
The Girls tell you about all the fun drinks they have consumed, that they are childhood friends, in Vegas to celebrate; everyone turns 30 this year. You wish them all happy birthdays, earning you a whoop and an offer (demand) to clink glasses. You never do tell them you live 2000 km from Ontario.
***
Talkative Bus Passenger, chatting animatedly with a mother and daughter from the South. Finding out the best things they have seen and done in Vegas, asking a bit about where they are from.
After several moments, your husband leans close to tease “You are the Vegas drunk now, honey”.
You shrug him off and continue your conversation about sweet potato pie with the woman and daughter, before his comment fully sinks into your fuzzy brain. Grinning, you apologize to the pair.
They laugh, soft sounds coloured by their accents. “You're fine.”
You proceed to regale them with tales of the drunks you have met in Vegas.

© 2016 Shannon


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Shannon
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This was a fun read. If you haven't actually met these people you certainly sound like you have.

I know one other person pointed this out but extra space or a title between sections would have been very helpful.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Shannon

7 Years Ago

Thank you. The formatting on this one is giving me a headache on the Café. But will work on it.
absolutely delightful read, S. written by someone with a keen eye. I loved these tableaux.

I wish you'd seperated these scenes by a bigger blank or maybe **** it took me a couple of seconds to realize you'd passed on to the second one.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Shannon

7 Years Ago

Compliment my writing and observation skills in one sentence. Thanks Woody. Also I will give the s.. read more
I really like this. A lot of this sounds like it's based on real events. The characters felt really real.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Shannon

7 Years Ago

Thanks for stopping by to read, i really appreciate it!
This story is the poster child for "SHOW -- don't tell" (first rule of good writing). I'm picturing everything clearly & your descriptions are such a delightful blend between cool/hip/on-trend along with everyday conversational. For example, the slurred comment about band t-shirts . . . excellent true-to-life sound in your made-up quote . . . followed by the real thing, in case we couldn't decipher (good move). So many nice touches like this. And the people described are so recognizable, yet your portraits are not cliché. I love people-watching & so I love your final invitation of your author's note . . . we should all practice doing character profiles like this, as it gets to the heart of a good story.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Shannon

7 Years Ago

Thank you barleygirl. I sort of feel like there is an element of people watching on the Café here,.. read more
barleygirl

7 Years Ago

I totally believe these aren't exaggerated! I think people are so delightfully weird, we only need t.. read more
This story is entertaining and funny. I love witty writing and you nailed it. My only suggestion would be the font - I had to re-read the first three stories to get the flow. I have been to Vegas a few times and you drew me back on Fremont Street - I even remembered the smells. :-) Thanks for sharing!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Shannon

7 Years Ago

Thanks for reading. Fremont street best part of Vegas, as far as I am concerned. How does the fon.. read more
Candace Cloud

7 Years Ago

Your bold isn't broken up until Fremont Street - the first three stories run together. Sometimes, te.. read more
Shannon

7 Years Ago

Thanks. Sigh.
I crossed the country four times when I was in the service. I would stop In Reno or Las Vegas. Your story is true. I met some wild folks. I liked both places. A place where true face is hidden and you can have some fun. I did enjoy this story. Thank you for sharing the excellent tale.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


Shannon

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much. I am glad that this rang true for you, it seems as though those who spent the most .. read more
Coyote Poetry

7 Years Ago

I had a lot of fun. Some places are made to be enjoyed.
I'm laughing out loud... How superbly you have described the smallest of aspects of these drunks... The first one the convention attendee, could be the most humorous one and feels like we all have seen hima somewhere, his sleepy sleepy drunken condition and hardly understandable words makes the reader laugh... And then comes the narrator's husband, and I can tell that he was confused, and the high five with him was another witty scene...

The second one, I think the that one gives more amusement and interest to the story... How you have described it seemed very much visual to me, when he continuously mumbled "sis'er" and followed the narrator until the security officer came in, it built up great amount of intensity...

Then came the girls weekend crew, I felt like they were thinking Ontario was at their backyard... I loved the response of the narrator in each scene...

Your ending with a perfect punch line makes the story a fun filled write with a thoughtful ending... I must say it was worth reading S... Lovely... Another milestone for you as a writer...

Sincerely
Dhiman

Posted 7 Years Ago


Shannon

7 Years Ago

I am glad you liked it. It took some mental gymnastics to get on paper. I am glad you can see the h.. read more
Quite the collection of drunks in this story, I thoroughly enjoyed it and found it to be amusing.

'Don’t you just hate it when people wear a t-shirt and probably don’t even know the band?', as he tilts his head in the direction of a young woman with her considerable assets on display in what might be the remnants of a vintage Skid Row t-shirt." made me chuckle.

I found the "Last Decade's Frat Boy" to be the most entertaining character until the Talkative Bus Passenger which I thought was a great twist to end this story.
The Fremont Street Wanderer was quite an odd fella, but it's interesting to learn about these characters from a present perspective. This was quite the amusing tale. I cannot think of any feedback to offer at the moment, I enjoyed this style of writing, but it's the ending that really made this story for me. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Shannon

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much. Glad to have given you a chuckle. I appreciate you stopping by to read.
Lost, n'MT

7 Years Ago

You're very welcome. I was intrigued by the story as whole as I found myself relating to it from you.. read more
Hi S. Mi, Stopping by to return the favor of a review -- in fact I think I owe you and others at least a couple! I enjoyed this story and can easily identify with the experience. Just a couple of suggestions. I like the way you delineated the characters for the most part, but the opening seemed a little fuzzy for me -- then as the description went on, particularly after the guy gets off the plane, I had a better grasp on him. I also enjoyed the ending and wish you had prolonged that a bit with more specificity -- how was the protagonist the "drunk" now -- some amusing thing she did -- slur her words? If you were watching her on the bus, how would you be aware she'd had too much to drink?

Posted 7 Years Ago


Shannon

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much for the thoughtful review. I struggled with this one, for sure. Who writes in secon.. read more
This is very entertaining. My only suggestion would probably be something to do with a Cafe' font glitch. The font is clearer and easier to read when you get to the Freemont Street Wanderer.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Shannon

7 Years Ago

Thanks k. Was aiming for entertaining for sure. The font feels like a moving target these days on t.. read more
Lyn Anderson

7 Years Ago

I know, there are frustrating glitches with all sorts of things to do with word processing.

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