DEPARTURE of LOVE

Still! sleep! my love is away! 

What the world are say? 

Calm! mute! dead, my love! 

Where gone, my dove? 

Oh God! what you have done? 

Parted with me, there is none. 

My reign of love is now ruin 

And sobs, distress are placed in vein. 

Now worse is my beauty 

With me who will be naughty. 

For what, my lip, my eyes, is 

By love who will increase? 

Pale, cold, my love is front of me 

Now, what would life be? 

No! I can not live with this nightmare 

I'll rid myself from the world unfair. 

Life's pretty sunrise turn into dark gloom 

I not see the white flower, bloom. 

Alone, miserable, YOU curse to live 

Oh God! death! I through this life.

Reviews

[Penny]

Sorry for the delay. The whole poem, its tone specially makes it look like an arguement with God, a complaint. One can see the painbut what I saw with it was your struggle to blame it on others. I don't know whether whose mistakes have given you this pain, but this struggle if used at the right place would surely not let you give up on life. Take carel.

[Saddam]

thank you dear friend....as you suggestion, someone other tell me too so i'm trying to do new life with new view. thanks.

[Penny]

My pleasure. If you need any help or emotional support, I am just a message away.

[Saddam]

thanks you dear friend. I will.

[Oyindamola Shoola]

this is beautiful...I have never seen a poem like this before...

[Simran Kewlani]

I apologize from being rude. But, this sounds violent.
Love is a beautiful feeling and you just turned it into an arguement.
I agree with penny, It sounds like an argument.
Not the best you can do.

[Sonam]

Such a wonderful one...it represents your pain so well...very beautiful one :)

[lissalovesyou]

Such a great piece! I can feel the person's feeling of how unfair it was, how it shouldn't have been that way. And the great picture adds to the meaning.
lissalovesyou:)

[Cory Barrett]

There needs to be a follow up of rebellion and haste.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Such a powerful write, beautiful. Well penned.

Kaze~ :-),

[Brook]

Very beautiful tone, and rhythm. Stunning write xo

[Ruth]

So painful and yet so insightful! You have a lot of emotion within your poetry, lovely x