AN EVENING

AN EVENING

A Poem by Saddam

At the time of evening

She was at opposite roof of him

And he was other side of road

Eyes were on each other

They were smiling for no reason.

 

Aware with the others, yet…

Hearts blooms when he sends flying kiss

She catches it

Cover her face with same hand.

 

When mislead wind play with her hair

That time her DUPATTA hovering

Making trouble

She tries it to hold properly

He smirked on her blend behavior

Girl snidely got angry

Stumpy turn around

Then he caught his ear with queer face

And she burst into laugh. 



© 2014 Saddam


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a little tough to catch the grove but once i did the story unfolded good write

Posted 9 Years Ago


Haha that's cute n simple :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Saddam

9 Years Ago

thanks buddy.... have a nice day...
╰☆╮This is lovely. My favorite part is blowing the kiss to the girl. Great work!╰☆╮

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is cool. I like the flow of the story, cute but simply romantic.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Well constructed and expressed.


Posted 9 Years Ago


This was a sweet evening time :)
Simple and nice :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Well...Ssad..this one is a sweet poem...it has a touching sense of brewing romance...well written

Posted 9 Years Ago


So sweet and carefree sweet love
as it should be.



I love your Hand writing very nice :)



I loved these stanza's lines
the most so very cute and sweet.




At the time of evening

She was at opposite roof of him

And he was other side of road

Eyes were on each other

They were smiling for no reason.



Aware with the others, yet…

Hearts blooms when he sends flying kiss

She catches it

Cover her face with same hand.

Thank you for this sweet little piece and thank you
for your kind review and comment you left on my page.



Blessings. kindred poet

Posted 9 Years Ago


Really nice! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is very cute. I love it.

Posted 9 Years Ago



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RASRA, BALLIA, Uttar Pradesh, India



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