The End of the World

Please, drop me a comment and tell me exactly what you think. I've had too many people tell me how great it is, yet I'm sure improvements are needed. If there are any details you feel are missing, speak up and I will try to add them when I can. If any parts confuse you, please say so and I will try clearing them up. Or if you notice anything else at all, spelling error, missing punctuation mark; don't hesitate to let me know. Thank you.