In Between Worlds

My worlds collided.

Head spinning

Extremities tingling

Just one tour of Mill City

Makes me dizzy

For I've lived several lives

I’ve died many deaths

Still some pains I'll carry

'til my last breath

Bringing you here I realize

The only pride

I can claim here

Is to have survived

Sarah Hampton

April, 2015

Author's Note

A quick rhyme.

Reviews

[Charlee Richards]

I really like this, however with my honest opinion I would maybe suggest keeping everything in the same tense. "I can claim here is to have survived" is a little harsh to my ears, doesn't quite ring. Other than that, I enjoy your use of emotionally rich words. Keep it up

[Sarah Hampton]

Thank you, I appreciate your honesty!

[Adam Adams]

"For I've lived several lives
I’ve died many deaths... "

Beautiful choice of words you've come up with. Very passionate art i've found in your pieces. I believe, in love-life.. everyone lives several lives & dies countless deaths, for no reason. Liked the structuring of your deepen words. Great job!

[Sarah Hampton]

Exactly! Thank you so much!

[Ashadan]

I appreciate the poem. =)

[B]

I love the last line

A wonderful closing

Quite cool

[Sarah Hampton]

Thanks so much!

[sinNsincerity]

Nice write Sarah. I enjoyed it.