End Of My Life

The Innocent Suicide Of An Isolated Man

Shining Sun and Shining Stars 

were fading away;

Because I'm going far away 

where no one can't see me 

how I'm.

Story of my life was blued.

I'm crying again while 

thinking of those days again.

Tears fell from my eyes 

when I fall in my mom's eyes.

Then she wiped my tears 

with a smile on her face.

When smile blooms on my face

Her smile vanished in her face.

I cried again and waited for 

My mom to wipe my tear again.

But she went away from me 

like a  passing cloud.

I realized, I've lost the heaven

of my life.

Finally they threw me out of

their life.

I lived alone in this cruel world.

Somehow,

The days have passed quickly.

But still,

I'm in the same condition.

Losing all my sensation.

Sorrow of my life evolves tomb

for my life.

So, How I could be brave 

when all the white flowers

were fallen into red river.

My heart is crying like a child

for the piece of happiness.

Which, I never seen in my life.

And, How I could live forever.

When I realized,

The tears of my unhappiness 

were last long to be forever.

I'm crying again

In the sorrow of pain.

And, I couldn't handle it anymore.

So, I'm going far away 

where no one can't see me 

how I'm.

Oh, My dear heart you, don't worry 

I will take you  with me when 

I go away.

My mom will be there for us 

to wipe the wounds which people

gave to us.

Saying my final goodbye to this 

Cruel world.

Cause I'm going away to see my

Mom again.

- FIN -

Author's Note

Sorry for the Grammer Errors...

Reviews

[Ruth]

So emotively layered...I felt this, powerful piece :)

[Emily]

Nice meaning!!
Well done!!

[Geca]

Beautiful, touching piece. I could feel the raw emotion just simmering underneath the surface. I commend you for the striking impact you left on the readers of this piece. Some grammatical errors are just a footnote, they can easily be fixed. Overall, good job with this nice piece!

[Neo]

I'm afraid for the day that I won't get to pick up the phone and cry to my mother about my bad days. While this poem reminded me of my fear, it's also a beautiful reminder that we very well may see our loved ones again. I really like that this poem is cyclical. It flows really well, despite a few spelling and grammar errors. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Elisa]

So sad, so brutal, and so honest. You really captured the feeling of hopelessness that comes with the loss of a loved one. I'll just refer you to the review below. I completely agree with them. Thank you for sharing this with all of us!

[Rounak Jain]

that was saddening. Grammatical errors though. Mother's worth is cant be replaced. tru. Thanks for sharing

[Deepika]

Mother's love has no equals. An intense and heartwrenching write!

[Ana B.]

Raw and powerful......like all downfall moments.....a stunning write !

[Jamestown]

Fantastic write! Much emotions running wild and well written!
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!