beyond your fingertips

beyond your fingertips

A Poem by SasukiMimochi

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I fall beyond your fingertips
I collapse beyond your crimson lips
I decend beyond your crystal wish
I will decay in a crimson dream
Of every peril i stop to cry
The tear drops might even fall
to the parched open sky
I hold onto what you wish for
and breathe in so deeply
To think to myself how i became so
The breeze, so pale, just blow

© 2009 SasukiMimochi

Author's Note

hehe appropriate critique please

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This was wonderful, Im glad I decided to read it. Very creative with your words!

Posted 11 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You are veyr creative and talented, at least I think you are.
Your last line just stands out. Amazing write.

Posted 11 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Added on April 15, 2009



It is a mystery!, TN

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