Walking backwards

there are sometimes that we wish we could look forward, and to look good memories, as if doing so we could live them again.

A step that leads to the past,
is all I wish I had.
Or some seed to harvest,
that grows under the ground.

If only sinners cried,
and begged for forgiveness.
But their hearts only starve,
cause they have some illness.

Maybe if I step back,
my watch will turn backwards,
to turn brightness into darkness,
and sunset into sunrise.

Maybe, our lifes should have been
as our pictures on the phone,
a non motion static moment,
eternally happy for sure.

A heart that beats inwards,
to suck all that blood.
Consumed by our body
that disturbs our soul.

If only memories were fuel
and our dreams a time machine.
We could step back from now,
go somewhere called "Yesterday".

Sinners have hurt us so much.
And I still feel like hoping
that somehow I will find
How to look behind.

Author's Note

I may extend this, I still don't know :D

Reviews

[MoriartyMesa]

Now do not take this personal, I felt this was a bit pushed (not like some one with 22 items in a 12 item check out) But i felt like there was more, some holding back. It was good but you can make it great!

[Fernando Dardón]

Oh, it's impressive to see a different review. Don't worry I don't take it personal, but could you explain yourself a little better please?

[BJovi]

This was really good, I enjoyed it quite a lot(:
Good job.

[Fernando Dardón]

thank you very much!! I appreciate your review :D

[Shaquana Adams]

This is so sweet and sad. You are a very good writer. This reminds me of that movie Source Code. If you are going to extend it, I suggest adding more about specifically what you want to look behind at like an old childhood memory or something. Thank you so much for sharing this with me :)

[Fernando Dardón]

yes, Actually something that happened with a very friend of mine inspired me, she had some big troubles with her boyfriend (the sinner). She was so sad, and I wish I could take her to the past, where we were happy at school, out of worries.
Thank you so much for your review!! :)

[Shaquana Adams]

Anytime Fernando! :)

[Fernando Dardón]

by the way, I haven't seen that movie, so I have no idea what you're talking about lol! :D

[Shaquana Adams]

Lets see. Long story short a man's brain is hooked up to this machine and his job is to go back in time and save the country or something like that. He keeps failing and

*spoiler alert*

at the end he ends up being able to stay in the past with the love of his life instead of going to the future (or present) to die.

[Fernando Dardón]

what an irony, cause we expect to find the love of our lives in the future, not in the past. Sounds interesting, I must see it!! :D