It Gets Better

It Gets Better

A Poem by Sbchristie
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I wrote this while I was going through some rough times in my life.

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My conscience bares witness.

To the unkind things in this world.

I've barely left my front steps.

Now I just wish to end, this march.

Ring in the day

like a new year.

In hopes to change.

Celebrate the past year,

like Tomorrow's your

final day.

I don't like to hope.

I'd much rather fall to my knees

and have faith. 

I'll stand on my own again.

You don't have to help me

to my feet.But you can help me

Understand.

That it will get better.

Things always, get better.

© 2011 Sbchristie


Author's Note

Sbchristie
I like to write my poems as I would speak or recite them. So I know most of my poems won't have stanzas or rhyme schemes! If there are any really bad grammar or word usage issues. Be kind to tell me. I don't mind criticism as long as it's constructive! Thank you.

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Well you do have to watch your commas as Cole said. I like that you wrote it as you would recite it. Gives it a natural feel. Instead of unkind you could've used cruel, or malign, or disgusting. Instead of wish you can say "I long." Use a word that has a heavier feel to it, ya know.
It's depressing, yes, but it gives a feeling of hope, that little glimmer of light amidst the darkness.

Btw since you like photgraphy, you can look at photos, try to write out the scene, and I guarantee that it'll help improve your writing.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Well you do have to watch your commas as Cole said. I like that you wrote it as you would recite it. Gives it a natural feel. Instead of unkind you could've used cruel, or malign, or disgusting. Instead of wish you can say "I long." Use a word that has a heavier feel to it, ya know.
It's depressing, yes, but it gives a feeling of hope, that little glimmer of light amidst the darkness.

Btw since you like photgraphy, you can look at photos, try to write out the scene, and I guarantee that it'll help improve your writing.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Depressing yet hopeful. I've gone through some times like this in my life. You get your message across very well. One thing: watch your commas. x)

A+

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on April 8, 2011
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Tags: Hope, Happiness, anti, bullying, depression, abuse, victim, eating, disorder, suicide

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Sbchristie
Sbchristie

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Hello! I like to keep my life pretty private. So I prefer to go by the pen name SB Christie. I'm 22 years old and I come from Western New York where I do Martial Arts, Photography and write at leas.. more..

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