(W)Hole(s)

We all have holes that are part of a whole that we will never get back

help me look inside
my-
self aware of nothing
not a thing to
find(ing)
holes
where
am I
lost?

my arms are open
wide(r)
than the holes
in my
head(ing)
to you
reaching
out
to me.

Reviews

[daemok]

I didn't know what to think when I first read this. The second time I finally got the rhythm and the third time it dawned on me that this is masterful!
Here in the way you spaced each word (some having more than one meaning) you've made the reader stop and take in each line. I had to let it sink in and now I'm caught on the hook. More.

[w]

This was a fluke. I have tried to writ e more like it and failed. It is something that only time will allow me to touch again.

[Jordan A. Wilson]

is this another form you've developed? i can dig it.

[w]

Just something experimental :)

Just all it needs. Nothing more or less.
Perrrfect!

E.L.

[Amila Jay]

A great poem :))

[That_Girl]

Very interesting. I don't see many poems written in this style. I like it. :)

[w]

You've seen others? ;)

[That_Girl]

Har har. You know what I mean. ;)

[Laura Maidah]

It's lovely. Not overdone or melodramatic. Very cerebral. I'm fairly certain the line break is wrong for myself? Maybe I got the meaning wrong there. Like my "self". Otherwise, it needs a hyphen if you want to keep that indentation.

[w]

a hyphen would look nice there. thank you.

[Alicia Beavis]

I really like the style of this! It was a little bit different but not too much. Nice!

[Corset]

I read this and I am confirmed of the collective, that all the people we love in our
lives are a part of the whole, if there are holes, fill them with the love of your family and friends, and the way will be lit.