Cascade

 

Cascade

 

I feel weak

sitting here

Alone

So far removed from the fabrics of reality

a hole in my heart

and blood stains on my fingers

I wonder what happened?

How did I get this way?

how did I

become

This…

I feel weary

Wanting to give into the darkness

let it thicken around me

pushing in from every direction

until I fall into

myself.

Alone

I feel angry tonight

Bitterness clawing from the inside out

screaming at the betrayal caused

wanting the sweet taste of revenge

on my scorned disposition

releasing the venom

dripping off my

Tongue.

Dry

I feel dead

no longer a prisoner held under my own spell

watching the laughter fade away

feeling the numb drift in..

Light is withering

above my heart

Beating

Stop.

 

Until you...

Come crashing down

on me

Reviews

[robin]

If I could collect the rings of sound on ponds,
I would walk on the water to grasp them all
I would call upon the clouds again to sing
and raise the thermal birds to soar along
I would charge the Earth with energy for phosphorescent life
and raise you up in the glowing reign of Your Love's Majesty!

robin

[just is]

I can feel the emotion you have put into this write and it's very emotional.

[Spat Queen]

I have to confess, I haven't spent one minute with Silvia Plath for fear of wrecking my own train, so the tone of this is new to me. It is interesting, though. Nicely penned.

[Periac]

a brilliant write emotional and scarring.......i hope you are better.....maybe i will try and be here more....

[Dani California]

Wow Amber! Now THIS is emotional! I felt it from beginning to end.


"a hole in my heart
and blood stains on my fingers
I wonder what happened?
How did I get this way?
how did I
become

This�"


Ouch. Ouch. Ouch.. a million times.. Ouch. "how did I become.... this...". Oh how I have felt this
before, wondering if I'd ever recover, ever be whole again, ever breathe again.

I think this is one of my favorites of yours... yes, I do believe it is! j

Brilliant work. Just brilliant!

[Blue Sky]

Such an incredibly beautifully formed piece
crafted with excellence, it flows over with
emotions which very so brilliantly described

until I fall into

myself.

that's a great line itself, really a great piece
love your work here!!

[lilain]

My heart aches to embrace you and tell you all will be OK.

This is beautiful, Seri. The shape and flow of your words conjure emotions I know well and, if it is any consolation, you're not alone even in despair. We all sit with you below and dance with you above.

Well done!

[Mercury Mirrors]

Wow perfect description of how I was feeling last night. Before bed then it was just nightmares =/ But I love the way the lines get shorter & longer in a pattern, it really catches the eye, & as always you're uberdescriptive. Awesomeness ^^.

Many Kudos :],
Lizz

[Antonio Valentino]

Well if it's any consolation, I'm alone tonight too, and I'm feeling pretty weak myself.
On one hand it's always nice to know that you're not alone when you're not feeling yourself.
On the other hand, it's not nice to know that someone who is always positive, selfless, and good natured
like yourself, is not feeling so well.

Thanks for the poem dear. You must have read my mind. I hope you feel better real soon, happiness is the only thing that should be cascading down upon you.

Rich