Cold Quiet Corner

This cold quiet corner

Crowded by only a handful 

Moves along to its own rhythm

Out of tune with society.

A hundred and one feet pass by every second

Each one louder than the one before.

Last nights game and tomorrows plans

Come spewing from their mouths.

But the talk of a coming party has the loudest cry of all.

Every fake laugh

And cry for attention is silenced

When our voices create a barrier.

Life is muted for the moment

As we're trapped in our own world.

A hundred and one topics pass by every second

Each one more interesting than the one before.

Latest books read and tomorrows D&D game

Come spilling from their mouths.

But the talk of society and religion has the loudest cry of all.

This quiet cold corner

Now left empty

Still moves along to its own rhythm

Out of tune with society.

Reviews

[stephen dillon]

so far this may be the one

[Frieda P]

The sound of silence is almost always the loudest. Out of tune with society is a place where many of us dwell, it feels like that quiet corner is empty but in actuality it's quite crowded at times. Rhythmic life set to music, sometimes, ha, most times I hear the beat of a different drummer. Nice one!

[Anna]

Its a very unique corner, designated for metalheads in my school. This is my last year at that school, and its being remodeled and that corner will no longer exist. This is kind of a farewell, to that corner. Glad to see you got a good interpretation of it

[Frieda P]

No to worry, the meatheads will always find another corner. And the pleasure was mine.

[Anna]

With a saddened heart I must say, I believe I am the last of the metalheads in my school. This group called The Dank has died out, I'm the youngest one.

[Frieda P]

Well enjoy, you'll look back at your high school years a lot when you get older....

[Anna]

It'll be something I never forget.

[KAOlmsted]

The main reason it is quiet and cold is because there are only a handful of people who are smart enough...or stupid enough, one might argue...to tackle the relevant topics. It is so easy to say "Great game..." when what we really want to say is "Why the f**k does the leader of the free world have enough time on his hands to regulate football...?" I am looking at you, Anna ;-)

[Anna]

You got the idea. Although I am Canadian, so its all about hockey, not football lol. This corner is about metalheads in a school/city that is highly religious and judgmental. Our cold quiet corner is a group of people who aren't like everyone else, therefore shunned by our society.

[KAOlmsted]

Be it metalheads (I am...so...my god...a metalhead...and, at 42 ;-) I can honestly say I was there at the beginning) or any other group who feels ostracized from quote-unquote society, you captured it well. F**k everybody else. Honest to god...they are "everybody else" because "we" say so...and everybody knows..."we" are always right ;-)

[Anna]

Glad to hear someone else agree, especially someone of your age. Its one thing for a teenager to try and argue a point to a parent or adult of a society like this, but to have another adult feel the same way. Its inspiring

[KAOlmsted]

hey! I got proofed last night! (in the liquor store) (the gal was fascinated with my ID) (said she'd never seen one that asks for eye color or weight) (I told her I lied about one) (she had the southern decency to ask politely, as she looked into my GREEN eyes...) (which one??) I love the south...

I am certain I had a point...

[Anna]

That's why I'm up here in Canada, we know whats goin' on, eh.

[KAOlmsted]

That's the only reason? It may be more likely you can't immigrate here because you'd have to queue up behind the people who have come here illegally...they get a f*****g pass. Meanwhile, I am not even allowed in Canada because I got a DUI 21 years ago. You people know how to man a border...any advice? ;-)

[Anna]

Hey, I was born in California. Just got my Canadian citizenship and passport. Duel Citizen. I can go to the states any time I want. Im still here for a reason lol. You still can't get into Canada after 21 years? That's harsh.

[KAOlmsted]

I actually looked into getting a Canadian visa back in '99, before I moved to Seattle from Connecticut (to live in Canada)...it was not impossible...it was just...are you f*****g worth it? (Canadians are harsh *laugh*) What can yo do for us that I cannot get from a Canadian citizen? *laugh* well...you know, your being from California and having dual citizenship, bet that's near on impossible unless you have a relative...lucky you.. The only people in my life who have dual citizenship are my husband, his ex-wife, and my step-daughters...(England, though...not Canada)

My 8 year old daughter, though, by default, is a British subject, yet she never stepped foot on the soil ... That British cum is powerful stuff, dude ;-)

I need to get am enhanced license just to cross the border...

[Anna]

If your husband is a duel citizen does that not make you a duel as well? While I was getting all my Canadian s**t through the government, they told me that whoever I marry, has the same rights and abilities as I do to get across the boarder.

[KAOlmsted]

I may have over stated for simplicity; we aren't actually married...just feels that way ;-)

[Angelove]

This is really really good. Js :)

[Anna]

Thank you :) May I ask what Js means?

[Angelove]

JS means Just Saying :)

[Nick.B]

Interesting, I can relate to this "quiet corner", great poem you managed to write here, the wall is too big, and that corner is so dark and cold...great job

[Anna]

Why thank you, its supposed to be about the corner at my school, where I, along with all the metalheads sit.

[Nick.B]

Oh metalhead? interesting I'm a classic rock guy myself

[Anna]

I like rock as well, and I'm sure I'll grow more towards that way as I age. But, for the time being Metal is my style.

[Nick.B]

So metal like in Black Sabbath, Iron Maiden, Judas Priest, Slayer, Ozzy, or Slipknot and Korn(just curious )

[Anna]

Yes and no. I do like the majority of what you just said, but that's kind of my secondary metal music. I am more into; Arch Enemy, Amon Amarth, Children of Bodom, Kalmah, Ensiferum, Eluveitie, Wintersun. To name a few that I like. They are more unknown bands from Europe.

[Nick.B]

Okay...

[Anna]

I'm sensing you either haven't heard any of those names, or you have and you have negative feelings towards them? lol

[Nick.B]

Most of them no I haven't heard of them...like I said I'm into classics what it used to be the hard stuff (Zeppelin, Pink Floyd, Hendrix, Clapton, Whitesnake etc...)

[Anna]

I applaud your taste, quite amazing talent if I do say so myself.

[Nick.B]

Thanks