Help Me Tonight

Help Me Tonight

A Poem by Shelby Baker



Hello there
 your my friend tonight aint cha?
Already taken some shots of you
Feeling my spirits heighten
memory puzzled a little like old age
Nice flame burning in my stomach
but my heart still squeezes
I thought you help with drowning
pain and sorrow
That's what I've heard
Why aint you helping me?
Please help me
I don't want to feel pain anymore
Please help me..
Jack Daniels.. me..


© 2009 Shelby Baker

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I've totally been there...and it ain't fun.

Good piece.

Posted 14 Years Ago

images of desperation are overflowing in this piece...the emotions for help are strong have captured this moment very well...

Posted 14 Years Ago

Good piece, sounds like a plea for help, not just from good ol' Jack either. It's painful to read, when one really thinks of it.

N. Strong

Posted 14 Years Ago

you inspired my first effort with this work....please let me know what you think!

Posted 14 Years Ago

sweet in a way, but there's a real pain underlying there. Nice work.

Posted 14 Years Ago

ah the burning in your stomach, then i puke hahaha. good poem, i think it would be cool if you made the words in the shape of a bottle :)

Posted 14 Years Ago

Ah, to hell with a review, just pass that bottle my way! lol

Posted 14 Years Ago

"Please Help me Jack Daniels" A beautiful, yet realistic line. I don't care what anyone says, I love this! Great Work.

Posted 14 Years Ago

Smiles... an impish piece of writing... spirited, one might say :-)

Posted 14 Years Ago

You write well but I seemed to feel the influence of too much Willie Nelson rather than Jack Nelson.
My poor wit.
There is a lack of depth to the poem and it deals with a matter that has been dealt with by so many poets. Try a more unique aspect of your life or reflections and let the world have them.
In short, it's fine, but it does show a fledgling poet searching for an original 'voice'.
Keep searching, I'll keep reading.

Posted 14 Years Ago

0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Added on October 30, 2009


Shelby Baker
Shelby Baker

Ware, MA

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