Shh

Just a reminder to shh

Shhh,

Listen, speak not of anything.

Shhh,

Pay attention, to everything.

Why is it we dont stop to just listen?

You miss the views and the joy that comes from quiet.

Shhh,

Hear the sounds of water trickle,

Hear the sounds of wind blowing.

Shhh

 

See the birds swoop and glide

See people walk and run.

Shhh

Close your eyes,

Smell the air

hear the world

listen to nature.

just SHhh

Author's Note

I am sure there are errors, this was something that came to me, Enjoy.

Reviews

[emipoemi]

This has potential, I'll grant you that. As I read it, I found there was a strong and necessary message weaved between the lines, but the flow/musicality is a bit wonky. not sure about that too much. There's a je-ne-sais-quoi missing from it. Also, if you're going to repeat words and sentiments, it must be to maintain power and not undermine the power the previous iteration: you say "listen" in Lines 2 and 5, and though both iterations are good on their own, you could still tinker with them, because the overall musicality is what really needs to be tended to.

But this is a great start. I can really get behind the message.

[TaraNicole]

Victoria what can i say.. namaste. As someone who perfectly gets exactly what you mean with "its not even dawn yet". I have spent many an endless night for days in a roll with my mind and my heart agonizing over EVERYTHING. I have a very acute sense of empathy so even that which burdens another far removed from me can have me breaking down. You put into words much i have felt or feel. Kudos!

[Victoria]

Thank you so much. I am glad I was able to convey the depth of feeling one can have for the ones around them and be often drown out by everyone else. Thank you for taking the time to read and leave feed back.

[TaraNicole]

Ditto..!!!

[Chris]

so many shout because they feel unheard... and they usually were/are unheard. But who is there to listen when no one is heard? This came across to me as "Take a pause and catch your breath..." and to listen BEFORE you start answering what you think was being said while the other is still trying to speak. Our perceptions are not always as accurate as we would hope.

[Victoria]

I am glad you were able to find a way to identify - this peace speak volumes to my life. Thank you for your feedback!

[Chris]

It IS a new year ...for even "old" ears.