Rude revelations

Paint pricked my fingers 
Red sheds into other hues 
Enthrall and swim together 
Messy scrawls ensue 

Busied palms smudge the colors 
Racing against my beating pulse 
Past these chaos and hoarded rules 
Mind slips towards a radiant null

Coaxed and coerced by the paint 
My layers scatter among greys and blues 
Lips break into a smile, bit faint 
Eyes emote overwhelmed with this prelude 

Subdued messages finally shout 
Silently to be heard and pray 
Crystal tears join the drought
nuanced images come to play

Author's Note

Thanks a ton, Beth aka KWP for taking this apart and turning my gears to attack this little thing more viciously and make it a bit more alluring.

P.S: Imagine yourself at every personal reference rather than the author..

Reviews

[ANTO]

It made me want to get naked and pour paint in large pools in various places on a huge blank canvas and just interact with it - roll about - swim in it - sleep on it - and then stand up and see the result.
It is emotive - its a bit primal too and its erotic.
Thanks Sindu and KwP. :))

[Sindu]

Oh ANTO! You made me laugh :D So you want to make fairies and angels in paint? When I said layers, I meant mentally but you took to a whole new level! Emotive- yes, primal- ok I agree, erotic- that's a whole new thing... When you stand up and see the result, the canvas or yourself? ;) :P
Thanks a lot for checking this out!

PS I have a couple of others (a couple exactly)if you want erotic

[ANTO]

You took the thoughts right out of my mind. As soon as i had written 'stand up' to see the result, I immeadiately thought - hey I would prbably be a better piece of art in all that paint than the canvas too.. great minds eh.
I dont necessarily want erotic - that like going up to someone who is admiring Michelangelo's David and saying to them - "Hi, if its c***s you like, come with me" ..lol
joking there by the way... lol
I didnt know I had a thing for paint until today lmao

[Sindu]

Oh god.. U had me in giggling fit. A piece of art you will be but will be very strange if you start admiring yourself all alone. You seem to have a weird thing for paint, I'd say. You're welcome by the way for making you realize that. I asked so you can see a difference. Still amused as to how you found this erotic... I cannot look at it in the same light anymore.

[ANTO]

Aw Im sorry Sindu - didnt mean to cast that light on it - it cast a light into my own proclivities so thats a first for poetry here. Thats unique. I was painting today with very potent paint - perhaps I got a bit high and confused. dont mind me. Thank you for not getting angry. Sorry :))

[Sindu]

Angry? Nope. Amused? Yes. Nothing to be sorry about.. Ok may be a little cos it's irritating to image u getting naked with paint when I read it :P
This got you thinking about proclivities? Wow. :D

[ANTO]

Thank you - and yes irritating to imagine the paint going to waste like that. lol

[Sindu]

As long as it's imagination, nothing is wasted. Technically. Hehe

[ANTO]

Haha so true - and I get a great discount at the imagination paint warehouse lol. so its not expensive either ...:)

[Sindu]

Haaha :) do let me have those offers too..

[ANTO]

I'll send some flyers to your mind-mail-box lol
thank you for the fun Sindu - you're a great sport - I appreciate that greatly. :))

[Sindu]

Thank you too, for the fun:) Ahh.. I can alright sometimes lol

[KWP]

ha don't thank me it was all The Sindu Chick X

[KWP]

How bout a Butt Cheek portrait? Or is that just being cheeky ?

[ANTO]

That would be scraping the bottom ...ahem ...of the barrel

[wordman]

sounds like the essence of your mind,your creation came alive

[Sindu]

Yes! That's exactly what I intended to show :) Thanks for checking it out!

[wordman]

you are welcome

[R Smith]

3 excellent stanzas making one superb poem, the colours of life, well done Sindu :)

[Sindu]

This one took it's sweet time invading my mind for improvements :)
Thanks Richard!

[Saddam]

silently to be heard, pray

Something different and powerful. Like it.

[Sindu]

Thanks ssadd :) I made a few changes

[Saddam]

That are pretty good and effective.

[Avinash]

This poem is too difficult for me to decode but somehow I still enjoyed it :)

[Sindu]

Honestly I find it unfinished but still posted it .. Spur of a moment thing. Thank you :)

[Sindu]

check it now..

[Avinash]

Now I get the picture. Its cathartic and beautiful.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!
beautifully worded.......great images
i loved it Mam!!!!
:)

[Sindu]

Thanks buddy :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

you are welcome............!!! :) :)

[KWP]

Hmmm yeah ... I like it ...

You have created a good picture here as a silent observer ...

[Sindu]

Thank you :) ..silent observer with screaming emotions

[Sindu]

How about now?

[~]

A wonderful swirl of emotions revealed with each hue of the paint pallet. You have done a gorgeous job enticing the imagination of the reader.

[Sindu]

Thank you moon :) paint connects a lot emotions without a need for a picture, right!

[Jamestown]

This my friend is art in words! I had such clear image's dancing
around in my head of all wonderful colors, then add the crystal
tears to make them clear is brilliant! Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Sindu]

Thank you so much! Colours have a way with connecting everything.
Or its just that I may be craving to paint as it had been years since I did ..lol

[Jamestown]

Could be:) your welcome whatever you do keep writing, lol