Hopeless Romantic

Hopeless Romantic

My skin sweats,

Bruises,

And bleeds.

My heart does two of these.

It also sings about my happiness,

Aches,

And agonies.

Why?

Because the pretentious watchers

Don’t know the real me.

A picture can capture a smile,

But it can’t view all of the pain

You been holding in longer than a while.

The hole on my sweater

Represents the emptiness inside of my chest,

So get inside of me.

Open heart surgery!

She had restored me with open arms and ears,

Her kindness had vanished all of my previous

Tears and fears.

She was there for me in the past,

But no longer remains

For the wonder years.

Is it too late?

When I met you I was blue,

I just really wish that

I had built up the courage to say:

I love you!

She has found another,

I couldn’t change her

And she couldn’t do the same for me.

Sometimes we have to save ourselves.

Where is she now?

Under the radar,

She lives with stealth.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

tragic ..emotive as can be for me ..my memories of being in love, afraid to say so and in the end it just not meant to be and she is lost ..oh how i remember ...and that pain of loss and sadness stays around a long time ...opeining lines are very strong ..i am captured and held in them ..your turn to "others" who don't look to see the real person adds another dimension ...unexpected by me ..but it makes for a baluster for the theme ..interesting closing ..she lives in stealth ..in hiding ..in secret ...much more than simply out of ones life ...nice read for me ..
E.

[sinNsincerity]

I'm really stoked that old memories and emotions resurfaced when you read it. That means that I did my job hehe.

[Real Inspiration]

You should print this out, make a cover for it, and sell it! Truly amazing!!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much!
That means a lot to hear =D

[Real Inspiration]

Sure thing. :) I'm always here to read and comment cx

[Ishita Dixit]

This was so good!
I liked that open heart surgery punch in between!
We often wait for too long to say something and realise this only when its too late.
And I believe you must never have any regrets.
So, the next time the lovebug bites you, say the magic words without overthinking! :P
great write! :)

[sinNsincerity]

I like that line too. Yep, I'm never going to let "what ifs" linger around any more.
Thank you for reading Ishita!

[Mirab Irfan]

Your poems show your pain.
Wonderfully penned.I love "the way" you write a poem.Only 'some' people have this quality in them!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much. That means a lot!

[nazia]

This is so painful. overflowing with the longing of your lady love. Its been few days since I last read any of your write. Thanks for reminding me how amazing you write :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for thinking so. You're AMAZING!

[B]

Lol

I like this one

Good job

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you!

[GreenEyedPoet]

"Because the pretentious watchers
Don’t know the real me."
So true, people are so quick to judge. Assuming they know you or what you've been through.

Love the imagery in this piece. Great write Sin!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Ms. Green eyes!
I'm happy that you loved it.

[GreenEyedPoet]

Welcome. :)

[wordman]

i wonder my friend,does anybody really know us,our heart`s,our souls,our dreams

[sinNsincerity]

If they take the risk to get to know all of me... that's their choice alone...
Thank you for reading.

[JayceeC]

Hmm. I like this one too Sin, but maybe change the font when you are changing voices to get that back and forth dialogue outlined. It's there but even if this is a conversation with yourself it can become a bit to follow in the print with the lines as they are. Just a thought...~jan

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for reading Jan!

[Charlee Richards]

Love the internal dialogue. Love the will and strength you see in youself

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for thinking so as well as reading.
Have a great day.

[Joelle]

Beautifully written.
Thank you for sharing :)))

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for reading Joelle! =D