Live like You are Dying

Redeeming the time because the days are evil.

A season, an opportunity, and a section of time.

If I asked for any of yours, would you mind?

We all live in time and time exist.

We are all in the here and now, so we can’t escape it.

The what?

The now!

There’re are two groups of listeners: the ones that believe that there’s less time passed in front of them than more time behind.

There are others thinking the future is greater than the past.

Time will pass and as I’m thinking this, time is passing...

Infinite ages.

The activity is redeeming the time.

Here’s the world and we’re taking something from it.

It’s afforded to you and me.

I’m separating time and eternity.

I’m taking time from eternity.

There’s something more to this and I’m not being unwise to the words.

I’m using the time and ceasing the time.

The days are evil and yet still nothing has changed.

We make our own interpretations, but there is a will and here’s a reason for this meaning.

What is my life about?

We all ask this.

Am I redeeming the time?

Am I making it count?

I’m not living to live out the time, but to reach in the world for myself, so that I can reach out to others with the hope that one day I can make a difference.

Without using force, would you listen?

Only if I want you to.

I do have something to do.

What do we need to be saved?

The truth is simple, just believe!

There was a wake-up call and a witness.

It’s so overwhelming because I’m wanting to share without being obnoxious.

Shame and embarrassment are the works of the devil.

Formulating and ceasing the opportunity.

There’s acknowledgement of my own purpose in this time of eternity.

I’m reaching into time for eternities own sake and I’m not waiting because there is no perfect moment, just the now!

There’s something for you to hear.

Would you listen?

Only with the given ability of the known God that many refuse.

Can you relate?

Are you listening?

I have a darken mind, but I can’t always hide the light in my chest under a chair.

It will still illuminate what is to be known and that’s the truth.

I can’t buy back my yesterday’s, but I can write my own history.

I am not ashamed, so I’m reaching into the world and touching those that do not understand.

I know where I am.

Do you?

I’m not concerned with those that boast and hate me because I’m finding my own way.

This is what I have and my history starts every day.

I will travel through the thorns and darkness and I don’t want to be the same!

Reviews

[JPDonelan]

An interesting piece, with some thought provoking phrases and observations. But, there were also some lines that had me scratching my head.
The initial focus on time I felt worked, and I felt your transition from it also worked.

That said, I have some observations and feedback. Do with it as you will.

The word "and" in the second line might be unnecessary. Suspect it to be more a matter of preference in this case, but I find the flow works a little better. At least in my read.

In the fourth line, the tail end "time exist" is a bit wonky. It seems to mean little in context of the set up, and makes me think you meant to have it say "exist in time."

In the eighth line, I'm not sure I follow the word choice behind "listeners." Thinkers, as used in a line a little further beyond (the tenth or eleventh), seems to serve better. Though, ultimately, I believe the word "thinking" might serve better considering where the piece seems to go.

I have one point with the following line: "I have a darken mind, but I can’t always hide the light in my chest under a chair." The word "darken" should probably be "darkened" considering the functioning tense.

That is all I have for now.

[Valentine]

I was quite ill for 10 years. If I could I would love to regain that time. Thankfully God spared me for His own reasons. Valentine

[LKBillips]

I’m reaching into time for eternities own sake and I’m not waiting because there is no perfect moment, just the now! Love this thought and line! There is never a perfect time for anything only a chance to be more than you were than the moment before. This poem really spoke to me. Your ideas were intriguing and thought provoking. Keep it up!!

[annalysiar]

I enjoyed the flow. The process. Metamorphous that happens throughout this

[Gcina]

Your writing is thought provoking! Keep it up :)

[sinNsincerity]

I would hope so and thank you for thinking so!

[jeannemarie coulter]

full of food for thought...

I’m reaching into time for eternities own sake and I’m not waiting because theirs is no perfect moment, just

in the above line i would change theirs to there as it would read more easily...all of your words are well chosen as a whole...thank you

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you I edited that.

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Wow, my friend, this blew my mind even more! You have surpassed your own greatest heights (and no doubt you will do it again and again). What a philosophical dialogue between a sage or a person who has lived a while, who has seen many great things (and not so great things), who awakened to the here and the now with a person who is still lost and confused, who measures time in boredom or bliss or lives in the past or the future.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Nadia! That is truly a pleasure to hear. Especially coming from you!
I wrote this right after coming out of some rough times. I'm only twenty five, but like you said, I have experienced a lot in that quarter. I have always believed everything happens for a reason and this has allowed me to learn from everything I have ever been through. I have plenty of parts to play in this life and one of the most important ones to me is to pass on what I have learn, so someone else may better themselves...

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

It is definitely not pleasant going through suffering, but I think through suffering we actually learn the most. If life was smooth sailing all the time, we wouldn't expand and appreciate life even more.

[Abilash Uttama]

This is such an interesting piece, made my day. Thanks for sharing and I loved these lines
This is what I have and my history starts every day. I will travel through the thorns and darkness and I don’t want to be the same!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[A. Fiorillo]

I'm not concerned with those that boast and hate me because I'm finding my way. This is what I have and my history starts everyday. I will travel through the thorns and darkness and I don't want to be the same!
My faaaaaaavorite part! Awesome.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you! That's really great! Those lines hold so much value to me.

[yvo miki]

very intresting this is a good poem i love the way this poem flows

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for thinking so and for reading Yvo!