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My heart's a sleeper cell.

It's as sleepless as hell,

But here is where I rest...

A Midsummer Night's Dream.

Come.

Com'on!

Don't be frightened.

I promise

- it's quite Shakespearean.

More like Marlowe's Dr. Faustus.

No pentagram,

Just a madman's ventures

For virtue and sin.

Let me in.

But it's dark here...

Blackened soul,

So no need for a blackened mirror

When dwelling on reflections.

I seek metamorphosis as did Ovid,

While resisting Mephistopheles...

Reviews

[Stacey Appleby]

I love this especially the first part " my minds a sleeper cell as sleepless as hell". It reminds me of my mind when there are a million things whizzing around inside and i can't sleep. I also liked this bit "just a madman's ventures for virtue and sin". It reminds me that everyone seeks adventure in their life.

[sinNsincerity]

Nicely said Stacey, that is what I was going for when I wrote that line. The madness within...

[Polly]

Haha, this is such a cool piece! I loved the references. :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Polly.

[Nina H.]

Such a different piece, really like it. Love the references! Great work!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Nina.

[WordKnurd]

Gotta love a poem that references Shakespeare, Marlowe, and Ovid in just one stanza! I really think you're on to something here, it just needs to be flushed out a little more. In poetry, the golden rule is "show me, don't tell me." I wish there were a few more images from the plays. Instead of "a madman's ventures/for virtue and sin," which is intangible, I want a full, multi-sensory experience. I want patchwork peasants riding hay bales, or Faustus' fingernails scraping the floor as he's being dragged into Hell. This poem is an interesting statement. Now make it an interesting experience as well. With that in mind, I promise you you will never struggle to meet a word count ever again :)

Keep up the good work, and please review one of mine if you get the chance.

[sinNsincerity]

I tend to use the golden rule when I write my short stories and in some of my poetry, but I like leaving my poems open to interpretations so that the reader's imagination may journey a bit. I totally get what you are saying though, and I highly appreciate your thoughts on it.
I can tell from reading your poems that you do a superb job at do so. I really enjoyed your Eve poem the most. It really puts a stamp on all the women who continue to follow her and the sins that are carried along because of he wrong doings.

[Devious13]

I Adore it i have to say furtively frightening yet powerful in a mix of poetic genusus over the rocks ... the intake is hard but smooth once taken in ....BRAVO....

[ManasaC]

I am not very prudent while giving out reviews. I was very enthralled by this piece. I can't quite put a finger on everything it talks about. But I love this very much. This is really nice.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for that, and I'm well pleased that you had enjoyed it.
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