Maelstrom

One of many poems that will be coming out soon. I'm sure when they're finished, you'll enjoy them

Manoeuvring pseudonyms delusional illusionist like unforsaken painstaking disassociation of reawakening undertakers evaporating hatred of a paragon indomitable mitochondrial Holocaust of Neanderthal velociraptors shrapnel’s Capricorn forsworn oracles pandemonium imploding symphonic origami of claustrophobic paparazzi colossus, mafia of octaves operating through the insanctuary vanquishing amputated contamination quarantined intravenous meteorites trampoline through amphitheatre of onomatopoeia  indecipherable bleeding hearts of margarine amphibious embitterment viscous promiscuous whisperer Mxyzptlk shapeshifting syphilis ventriloquists off-kilter civilians demilitarized by leviathans cytogenetic genesis of bioweapon dabbling in the sabbatical metabolism’s algorithmic trajectory of imperfections indefinite renegade of deities fealty pledging longevity’s imbedded in the brethren of maleficent deathless breath-takers and plane walkers that stalk the comets of gothic automatons frothing from the psychotropic apocalypse

Air conditioning intuition, got my head in the clouds

Indiscriminate scripture ridiculous, but I’m too meek to be proud

Out the speakers my sound

A thorn in my side that wants to be a sunflower

In a bipedal cathedral of realism in a maelstrom’s cerebral reavers seeking the equilibrium of Galileo’s fairy-tales like a beacon of pyrokinesis eclipsing

Nothing pulls my heartstrings like a guitarist strumming the barbed wire satellite of my soul’s poltergeist, a slave to the rhythmic photosynthesis ventriloquist magnificent centrifugal precision guillotine of words internally permanating sermons of hernia hypothermic eternities in the current flowing fortissimo rubato cauterizing the horizon to the earthen surface reinterpreting serpentine dreamlands of glamorous Babylonian sandpaper amalgamations

 

Envisioning stitching my shapeshifting hieroglyphics back together, when I’m hanging by a thread the guitar pic eviscerates the hurricane of my brain with the insatiable angels of a headphones halo, hanging by a kaleidoscope's cable 

Author's Note

I very seldom reply to reviews, but I promise I read EVERY single one. I look forward to my next review, because it helps me learn. Even if it's just one word, I promise, I will be ecstatic to have the chance to hear what you have to say. Whenever you write something about my poems, or the themes of my poems, or criticize me it is not in vain. I will listen, learn and be thankful.

Reviews

[Pete]

well, you've certainly captured the powerful turmoil with your swirling words and imagery in your usual machine-gun manner.

this line stood out and really made me stop and think:
"A thorn in my side that wants to be a sunflower"

i particularly enjoyed this part at the end:
"the guitar pic eviscerates the hurricane of my brain with the insatiable angels of a headphones halo, hanging by a kaleidoscope's cable "

good stuff ... :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think we should just start all over...it's a mixed up, mumbled up, shook up world as the Kinks once sang.
and it is just getting worse...and you capture that in this stream of consciousness write, that has so much momentum....and shows us the non-stop angst we feel from the non-stop chaos we have created.
good stuff.
j.

[Ghost writer]

That's pretty good, I feel like that last little section was a really natural quick flow because it's so smooth sounding.

[.]

Certainly you gotta know, I was waiting for a new poem today...haha😂
These words sound so much like reflexes, sharp and sensible. It's difficult to go through such poems in a state of mind I am in but I am loving this so much. When I think like ripping off, these poems are enough to make me think that things could have been more painful but it hasn't.
Sounds like you've worked a lot for perfection here, I can feel the smoothness in this one. A big thanks for this wonderful poem.

[R.J Calzonetti (SinisterPotatoe)]

Thank you for the supportive review. I'll try to be even sharper and smoother with the next poem. It's awesome to hear I'm doing well from my fellow poets. :)

[.]

Always supportive and encouraging... I think the next one is going to be great. Good Luck for that.
I'll like to see your reviews on my poems sometimes. 😀

[wordman]

reads like a horror movie of sorts

[R.J Calzonetti (SinisterPotatoe)]

Yeah, it's a little nuts for sure.

[Lyanth]

I was able to see few topics in this, which is considerably better than last time for me. Another well done piece, your words sort of are like a cliffhanger for me because I read to see what you will possibly find to rhyme with the previous words you've already got. Very intriguing, much like a mental Rubix cube trying to interpret this, but that may just be due to my mental disorder. Nonetheless, I enjoyed reading so thank you for the request.
It was fun.

[R.J Calzonetti (SinisterPotatoe)]

Thanks for reading, I'm glad to hear I'm improving!