"Day of Love"

I wrote this last Valentine's... Notice some of the sentences I say in the middle and end.

Ah yes the infamous Valentine's Day ; the day where even the non-believers stand together to pray to the omnipotent man in the sky. All to recieve good fourtion in life's game the majority call by the name love.

Women and men alike wear their inner heart exposed on their sleeve to depict the scene they expect to receive.

Well all expectations aside the vile non-imagitve scene I am practically forced to see just hanging by each corner. Some guy and girl acting like zombies eating each other's face out while leaning against my damn locker door.

I try to fake a bright smile and say a "Excuse me?" and the guy says something "Original" and "Oh so-oo witty." "You're excused."

Now I feel my blood boil and I shove them aside to the floor open my locker forcibly and knock the failed comedian back down and off his high horse.

Heading towards my class I hear the same ear cringing noise ; two sentences the usual "I love you." or the scapegoat for those who hold no real confidence to name of "Will you be mine?"

Rose petals dance across below my feet so much crimson I nearly believed my heart would leap from my chest's grasp to paint the remaining white on the tile floor.

Looking through the masses seeing their mouths move no doubt discussing the same dinner plans. All while the Eve to her Adam holds not an apple in her hand's but both a pair of cheap flowers and chocolate with a cut out price tag.

Reluctantly looking down I notice I too donned the color red from what I guess to be my festive instinct kicking in... However deep down I know.... I know I am one those fools expecting a change whilst holding on to my sleeve should my inner heart throbe and scream.

To try and turn tail and run from me while it still is holding my botteled up emotion's inside.

Now in motion towards the girl, head's swirling a storm leaving me sick with intruding butterflies. All of this just from catching a glimpse of her ever so beautiful iridescent eye's.

I see no real chance of victory to follow through. Just picturing that two letter word that will further puncture my bleeding heart. yet I still hold a glimmer of hope.

Rose in hand here goes nothing ...*Ahem* "Happy Valentine's and would you be mine?"

Author's Note

Please share what you thought and did anyone see what I meant by middle sentences and my ending sentencel?

Reviews

[Ana Papaya]

Young love, it's hard to remember what it was like. But I guess the nervous feelings don't change even as you get older. This was lovely. Love doesn't need fancy things, just needs sweetness, thoughtfulness and honesty. (Maybe just spellcheck) I enjoyed reading this one Sir A.

[Sir_Anonymous]

Thank you very much for taking more time to review and critique my work.... Also I tend to write a forshadow or background to better understand the character I wish to personify... In this case being in the middle (scapegoat for those who hold no real confidence to name of "Will you be mine?") at the end my persona further depicts his lack in confidence by saying ("Happy Valentine's and would you be mine?"

Sincerely, Sir_Anonymous

[Ana Papaya]

You're welcome. :)

[Sir_Anonymous]

Something that I have been wondering instead of selecting the poetry genre option should I put Chapter option like you seem to do on your works?

[Sir_Anonymous]

It's a little touch but it bothers me none the less.

[Ana Papaya]

I think it's a personal preference. I only do it this way because I have some stories, some children's writing, and a collection of old stuff. I am one of the few that does it that way. I think if this works then stick with this. If you are new then just take some time to get a feel for this site's functionality first.

[Sir_Anonymous]

Okay I seem to get a moderate amount of veiws but so far you've been the only person to review me or post a comment but this is only day two... Thank you for answering

Sincerely, Sir_Anonymous

[Ana Papaya]

I think if you review more people then maybe they will review you back but I know it doesn't always work that way.

[Sir_Anonymous]

Yeah the site said something about points but I don't understand how I view my points

Sincerely, Me again

[Ana Papaya]

I don't know, I've never cared about that.